Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clearer structure: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting reasons. Avoid repetition and informal contractions. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “parents were worried about safety” instead of “fear of accident”).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. My parents were worried about my safety because they thought I would ride it everywhere, so they decided not to buy one for me.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details with logical connectors. Avoid filler words (uh) and repetition. Organize information: mention general popularity, specify age groups, and give examples of popular models or reasons for popularity. Use plural/singular correctly.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially among teenagers and young adults aged 20 to 30. For example, sporty models such as the Pulsar NS-200 and KTM Duke are widely chosen because they are affordable and stylish, which appeals to that age group.

× I never had a bike when I was a child 'cause my parents always thought that I would ride it everywhere and with the fear of accident they never bought me a bike.

✓ I never had a bike when I was a child because my parents always thought I would ride it everywhere, and because they were afraid of accidents they never bought me a bike.

The original sentence uses informal 'cause and has awkward phrasing and punctuation. The main issues are clarity and correct past-tense and tense consistency. 'Was a child' and 'never had' are correct past forms, but 'with the fear of accident' is ungrammatical; use 'because they were afraid of accidents' to express reason. Also remove the redundant 'that' after 'thought' and simplify the clause to 'thought I would ride it everywhere.' Improve punctuation by using a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and.' Suggestion: keep past tense throughout, replace informal contractions, and use natural prepositional phrases for reason expressions.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country and especially in teenagers and the people with age range from 20 to 30 bike is more popular most of the people at that age by bike by bikes and uh, Pulsar NS-200 and Duke bike are very popular among teenagers and.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially among teenagers and people aged 20 to 30. Riding a bike is common for most people in that age group, and models such as the Pulsar NS200 and the Duke are very popular among teenagers.

This sentence has multiple pluralization and preposition problems and general sentence-structure issues. 'Especially in teenagers' is incorrect; use 'especially among teenagers.' 'People with age range from 20 to 30' should be 'people aged 20 to 30.' 'Bike is more popular' is unclear; use 'riding a bike is common' or 'bikes are more popular.' Repetition 'by bike by bikes' is redundant and ungrammatical. Also model names should be treated as plural or singular consistently; 'Pulsar NS200 and the Duke are very popular' is correct. Suggestion: use 'among' with groups, 'aged X to Y' for age ranges, avoid redundant words, and break long run-on sentences into shorter clauses for clarity.