Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor errors; lead with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid irrelevant or awkward phrases (e.g., “birthday person” and “after work” when referring to children). Keep it to under five sentences and use varied vocabulary to show range.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small red bicycle for my tenth birthday, and I rode it almost every weekend in the park near our house. I often rode with my brother, and we sometimes stopped for ice cream afterward.

Sugestão: Start with a concise opinion, then give two clear, specific reasons linked with connectors. Correct grammar and word choice errors (e.g., “delivery riders” or “delivery cyclists” instead of “deliver ride cycling”). Use varied vocabulary (e.g., convenient, economical, practical) and one concrete example to support your point.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are economical and convenient for short journeys. For instance, many students cycle to school, and I also see delivery riders on bicycles every morning during rush hour.

× My parents bought it for me as a birthday person and I used to ride it around the park near our house almost every weekend.

✓ My parents bought it for me as a birthday present and I used to ride it around the park near our house almost every weekend.

The word 'person' is incorrect in this context; the correct noun is 'present' to mean a gift. This is a lexical choice error within a past-tense sentence. Suggestion: use 'birthday present' when referring to a gift given on a birthday.

× For example, I remember riding with my brother and stopping for ice cream after work.

✓ For example, I remember riding with my brother and stopping for ice cream afterward.

The phrase 'after work' implies finishing a job, which is inconsistent with childhood bike rides; 'afterward' or 'afterwards' more naturally indicates stopping after the ride. Also, 'afterward' fits better with 'remember' in past context. Suggestion: use 'afterward' to indicate a subsequent action, or specify 'after the ride' if you mean after cycling.

× Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and good for short trips and many people use them to go to work or school.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap, good for short trips, and many people use them to go to work or school.

This sentence is grammatically correct but missing a serial comma for clarity between list items. The correction adds a comma before 'and' to clearly separate the list elements. Suggestion: use commas to separate three or more items in a list for clarity.

× For example, I often see students and deliver ride cycling in the mornings.

✓ For example, I often see students and delivery riders cycling in the mornings.

The original phrase 'deliver ride cycling' is ungrammatical and seems to attempt to refer to delivery riders. This is a sentence structure and word choice error. The corrected version uses 'delivery riders' as the noun phrase and 'cycling' as the verb, fitting the present-tense habitual context. Suggestion: use accurate compound nouns ('delivery riders' or 'delivery workers') and place the verb 'cycling' after the subjects.