Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, remove filled pauses (umm), correct grammar (use past tense consistently), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., however, so).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn’t afford one, but I loved watching other kids ride in the mornings. As a result, I promised myself I would buy a bike when I grew older and learned to cycle regularly.

Sugestão: Give a direct answer, avoid repetition and filler words, and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and clear vocabulary (popular, common, healthy habit).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, you can see groups of cyclists meeting in parks early in the morning, and many cities have dedicated bike lanes to encourage cycling.

× Umm not really umm my parents didn't give me a bike however I really wanted ones that really belongs to me and I really like umm cycling umm in the morning so and I think when I grew up I would have once and I would put it myself.

✓ Umm, not really. My parents didn't give me a bike; however, I really wanted one that belonged to me, and I really like cycling in the morning. I think when I grew up I would have one and I would buy it myself.

Problems: incorrect pronoun/plural 'ones' should be singular 'one' to match 'a bike'; incorrect verb form 'belongs' should be past 'belonged' to match 'wanted'; 'once' is incorrect word choice for 'one'; 'put it myself' is incorrect verb choice — 'buy it myself' fits context. Suggestion: ensure pronouns and nouns agree in number, use past tense consistently when talking about past desires, and choose verbs that match intended meaning. Use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Umm, of course, yes, it was really popular and it was cycling was uh, umm, uh, cycling was the kind of like a, a good habit, uh, that was really popular in, uh, in today's life and people enjoy traveling in the morning and gathering together.

✓ Umm, of course. Yes, cycling is very popular; it was considered a good habit and remains popular today. People enjoy riding in the morning and gathering together.

Problems: tense inconsistency — speaker switches between past ('was really popular') and present ('today's life', 'people enjoy') causing confusion. Repetition 'it was cycling was' is redundant. 'Traveling' is not the best verb for riding bikes; 'riding' is clearer. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when describing a general truth (use present simple), remove redundant phrases, and choose correct verbs for the activity.