Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity, use one clear topic sentence and up to four supporting sentences with correct verb tenses and vocabulary. Correct mistakes: say “hand-me-down from my sister,” use consistent past tense (e.g., “It was pink and had training wheels”), and avoid fillers and extra words. Add a brief specific detail (when you learned or a memory) and use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a pink hand-me-down from my older sister and had two training wheels. I learned to ride it when I was about six, and my brother taught me by running alongside and holding the seat. Because I practiced every day, I was able to ride without the training wheels within a few weeks.

Sugestão: Make your response direct and concise with one clear topic sentence and up to four supporting sentences. Remove fillers like “umm” and avoid repeating phrases. Use specific examples and linking words (for example, “for example,” “because,” “also”). Correct grammar: say “bikes are popular” and “delivery apps use them.” Mention reasons (traffic, cost) and give a specific example (delivery riders, commuters).

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in the Philippines. For example, many people use motorcycles and bicycles to avoid heavy traffic, and delivery riders on apps often use bikes to move quickly. Also, bikes are cheaper to run than cars, so students and workers commonly use them for short trips.

× It was a run me down from my sister.

✓ It was given to me by my sister.

The original sentence uses incorrect word order and wrong verb forms. Use the past tense passive construction 'was given to me by' to show the bike was received from the sister. Suggestion: use 'give' in past passive ('was given to me by') to express this idea.

× It is a pink one with two side wheels.

✓ It was a pink one with two training wheels.

Tense should match 'I had a bike' (past), so 'is' becomes 'was'. 'Two side wheels' is not a natural phrase in English; the correct term is 'training wheels'. Also keep adjective 'pink' before noun. Suggestion: match past tense and use standard term 'training wheels'.

× As I was still learning to ride a bike during that time, my brother was the one who taught me how to ride 1.

✓ As I was still learning to ride a bike then, my brother was the one who taught me how to ride.

Remove the stray '1' character. 'During that time' is wordy; 'then' is more natural. Tense 'was learning' and 'taught' are appropriate; just clean up phrasing. Suggestion: remove typos and prefer concise time expressions.

× In my country, which is umm I live, I currently live in the Philippines.

✓ I currently live in the Philippines.

The clause 'which is umm I live' is ungrammatical and redundant. Keep a simple clear statement. Suggestion: remove the incorrect relative clause and filler words for grammatical sentence structure.

× I can say that umm bike is one of the modes of transportation here umm by the people.

✓ I can say that bikes are one of the modes of transportation people use here.

Use plural 'bikes' to refer to the general category. Also adjust word order to 'modes of transportation people use' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking generally and place modifiers ('people use') after the noun phrase.

× You can see bikes everywhere, even those umm delivery applications umm, some of them are are.

✓ You can see bikes everywhere, even among delivery app riders; many of them use bikes.

Original sentence is fragmented, repeats 'are', and misuses 'those' with 'delivery applications'. Use 'delivery app riders' or 'delivery apps' and complete the second clause to explain that many delivery workers use bikes. Suggestion: restructure fragmented sentences and remove repetitions and fillers.