Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Content and meaning are understandable but language accuracy, coherence and vocabulary need improvement. You should give a direct topic sentence, then 1–2 clear supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, which). Use correct verb forms and precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘bicycle’, ‘pedals’, ‘children’). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences and use a linking word if adding detail (e.g. ‘and’, ‘so’, ‘also’).

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a small two‑wheeled bike with training wheels and pedals, which helped me learn to balance. I used it every day to ride around my neighborhood and visit friends.

Sugestão: The answer is relevant but contains repetition, hesitations and some incorrect word choices. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 2 specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (for example, because, and, also) to connect ideas. Choose precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘motorbikes’, ‘road bikes’, ‘commute’) and avoid repeating words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, people use both motorbikes and regular bicycles to commute because they are affordable and navigate traffic more easily, and many young people also ride sports bikes for leisure.

× Yes, uh, I was having a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'was having' which is incorrect for possession in past simple; possession is expressed with 'have' in past as 'had' (past tense). Also missing article 'a' before 'child'. Use simple past 'had' for completed past possession and include 'a' to form 'a child'. Suggestion: use 'I had a bike when I was a child.'

× It was a, a bicycle bike, uh, which, which, which we, which children's are usually drive with their feet.

✓ It was a bicycle, which children usually ride using their feet.

Redundant words 'bicycle bike' and repeated fillers. 'Children's are usually drive' is ungrammatical: 'children' is the subject, verb should be 'ride' not 'drive' for bicycles, and 'using their feet' or 'pedalling' expresses how they operate it. Also possessive 'children's' is incorrect here. Suggestion: simplify to 'It was a bicycle, which children usually ride using their feet.'

× It include pandas, uh, paddles on which we need to put our feet and we have to handle it.

✓ It includes pedals, on which we put our feet, and we have to steer it.

Several errors: 'include' requires third person singular 'includes' to agree with 'It' (subject-verb agreement), 'pandas' is a wrong word; the correct word is 'pedals'. 'Paddles' is incorrect for bicycles. Use 'put our feet' (simple present) or 'we put our feet' to describe general action. 'Handle it' is awkward for controlling a bike; 'steer it' or 'control it' is better. Suggestion: 'It includes pedals, on which we put our feet, and we have to steer it.'

× in my country, uh, there are different kind of bi bikes which are popular like sports sports bike, uh, normal bikes and people uh, usually travel with the with bikes because it's very convenient and, and easy and we can easily drive it.

✓ In my country, there are different kinds of bikes that are popular, like sports bikes and ordinary bikes, and people usually travel by bike because it's very convenient and easy to ride.

Errors: 'different kind' should be plural 'different kinds' to match noun phrase. 'bi bikes' is a duplication; use 'bikes'. 'sports sports bike' repetition; use 'sports bikes'. 'normal bikes' better as 'ordinary bikes' or 'regular bikes'. 'travel with the with bikes' should be 'travel by bike' or 'travel by bikes'. 'drive it' is wrong collocation for bicycles; use 'ride'. Also tense and number agreement corrected. Suggestion: 'In my country, there are different kinds of bikes that are popular, like sports bikes and ordinary bikes, and people usually travel by bike because it's very convenient and easy to ride.'