Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, and avoid filler sounds. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Fix tense and article errors and use a short explanation for the bike’s status.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a Bianchi bicycle when I was a child. It was my favourite because it had a bright red frame, but I don’t know where it is now — I think it was sold or left in storage.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (plural/singular, articles), use linking words to organise reasons, and add one specific example or statistic. Keep it to 2–3 sentences to be natural and effective.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, almost every child I know owns a bike and you often see groups of friends riding together after school, which makes cycling a common pastime.

× Yes, I did have a Bianchi bike when I was child, but uh, I don't know where it is.

✓ Yes, I did have a Bianchi bike when I was a child, but I don't know where it is.

Missing article before 'child'. The phrase 'when I was a child' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' to indicate a period in the past.

× I think it is stalled.

✓ I think it is stolen.

The verb 'stalled' means 'stopped functioning' and is unlikely for a missing bike; context implies the bike was taken or lost. If the student meant the bike is missing because someone took it, use 'stolen'. If they meant it was broken, use 'broken' or 'not working'. Ensure verb choice matches intended meaning.

× I agree with that because I see every children has a bike and they are riding bikes with their friend and they are pretty happy and this is the biggest cause of why I think bikes are popular in my country.

✓ I agree with that because I see every child has a bike, and they ride bikes with their friends; they are pretty happy, and this is the main reason I think bikes are popular in my country.

Multiple issues: 'every children' is incorrect—'every' requires a singular noun ('every child') (Grammar ID 1 and 27). 'Has' agrees with singular 'child', so keep 'has' with 'every child'. 'They are riding' is acceptable but 'they ride' is more natural for habitual action (present tense). 'Their friend' should be plural 'their friends' to match 'they'. 'This is the biggest cause of why' is awkward; use 'this is the main reason' or 'the biggest reason why'. Suggestions: use 'every child', ensure subject-verb agreement, use plural for 'friends', and choose concise phrasing for 'main reason'.