Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar, coherence and specificity. Begin with a clear topic sentence (past tense), use correct verb forms and noun phrases, avoid filler sounds, and limit to up to five sentences. Add a specific detail (e.g., age, bike features, routine) and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'and', 'so', 'because').

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bike with two big green wheels, and I got it when I was six. I used to ride it to the local park with my friends every weekend, and we often played there for hours. Because of that routine, I learned to ride confidently at an early age.

Sugestão: Clarify your opinion with correct vocabulary and grammar, avoid unclear words ('spies'), and complete your sentences. State a clear topic sentence (Yes/No/Maybe + reason), then add specific examples (age groups, purposes) and a linking phrase (for example, 'for instance', 'because'). Keep to under five coherent sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I think bicycles are becoming more popular in my country because people want healthier and cheaper transport. For instance, many elderly people use bikes for short daily trips, and children from about five or six start learning to cycle early. Teenagers also use bikes for exercise or to meet friends, which shows cycling is popular across ages.

× Yes, I have a bike when I want to try it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I wanted to ride it.

The question asks about childhood (past). The student used present tense 'have' and 'want', which is inconsistent. Change to past simple 'had' and 'wanted' to match the time frame. Also 'try it' is unnatural for riding a bike; use 'ride it'.

× So small red bike and is made with two big uh greens.

✓ It was a small red bike and it had two big green wheels.

This sentence lacks a proper subject and verb and misorders adjectives and nouns. Use 'It was' for description in past, place adjectives 'small red' before noun 'bike', and use 'had' to show possession of 'two big green wheels'. 'Greens' is incorrect; use the adjective 'green' modifying 'wheels'.

× And I always go. I always ride a bike to the park.

✓ I always rode my bike to the park.

When describing habitual actions in childhood, use past habitual 'rode' rather than present 'ride' and combine the fragments into one clear sentence. Also use 'my bike' to show possession.

× It's located in my local with my friends every weekend.

✓ I went to the local park with my friends every weekend.

'It's located in my local' is ungrammatical; use 'the local park' and past 'went' for childhood. 'With my friends every weekend' should attach to the verb phrase: 'went ... with my friends every weekend.'

× Hmm I think just is because spies are becoming popular when we in my country, especially for the elderly people and for the children who are from 5 or 6 years old and even when I am teenagers like this, I.

✓ Hmm, I think bicycles are becoming popular in my country, especially among elderly people and children aged five or six, and I did too when I was a teenager.

Many problems: 'just is because spies' is incorrect words and order—'bicycles' is correct noun. Use 'are becoming' is acceptable present trend 'are becoming popular', but 'when we in my country' should be 'in my country' and use 'among' for groups. 'Children who are from 5 or 6 years old' is more naturally 'children aged five or six'. The final fragment should be past: 'I did too when I was a teenager.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct pronouns and prepositions.