Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a good brief story. To improve, make the response slightly more natural and concise, avoid small redundancies (e.g., “when I was a child” after already stating past), and add one specific detail or reason to enrich the answer. Use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “however” or “after that”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike as a child. I used training wheels until I was nine, and then my father taught me to ride without them. However, I didn’t keep riding for long because our neighborhood was hilly and I preferred walking to school.

Sugestão: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but there are hesitations and minor grammar/fluency issues. Improve by removing filler sounds (uh), using clearer sentence structure, and adding a linking phrase (e.g., “for example” or “because”) plus one specific example or statistic. Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because many neighborhoods have narrow streets that are easier to navigate by bicycle. For example, many students and market workers cycle to school or work to save time and avoid traffic.

× But I never continued riding the bike long after.

✓ But I never continued riding the bike for long after that.

The original sentence is awkward and missing a time reference and preposition. 'Long after' needs 'for' and adding 'that' clarifies the time reference. Use 'continued riding the bike for long after that' to express that the activity did not persist much longer.

× Yes, bikes are pretty popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but can be improved for formality and concision. 'Bicycles' is a more formal noun than 'bikes' in exam contexts and 'quite popular' is a clearer collocation than 'pretty popular'. Change is optional but recommended.

× I live in the Philippines and there are a lot of small roads which uh would it would be easier for bikes to travel by And many students and even workers use their bikes to get to school.

✓ I live in the Philippines, and there are many small roads, which makes it easier for bicycles to travel; many students and even workers use their bicycles to get to school.

The original sentence has disfluencies, repetition ('would it would'), incorrect clause structure and punctuation. Replace 'which uh would it would be easier for bikes to travel by' with 'which makes it easier for bicycles to travel' to form a correct relative clause and subject-verb agreement. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formality, and avoid run-on by separating clauses with a semicolon or period. Also use 'bicycles' for formality and consistency.