Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct article use, verb forms, and avoid repetition (e.g., "for my birthday" repeated).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was about eleven my parents gave me a bright blue bicycle for my birthday, and I loved it. Because it was lightweight and had a comfortable seat, I rode it everywhere around the neighborhood, which made me feel very free and independent.

Sugestão: Give a direct, clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Organize ideas so they are coherent and avoid hesitations and unfinished sentences. Use correct tense and clearer comparisons between past and present.

Exemplo: Not as much as before. While bicycles were very popular when I was a child, nowadays many people prefer motorbikes and cars because they are faster and more convenient for longer distances. As a result, cycling is mainly popular among students and fitness enthusiasts rather than the general population.

× Yes I did, when I was around 11 years old my parents gave me blocked bicycle for the my birthday gift for my birthday.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was around 11 years old, my parents gave me a black bicycle as a birthday gift.

Errors: missing articles and incorrect word choice. Use 'a' before singular countable noun 'black bicycle'. 'Blocked' is wrong word; likely 'black'. Remove duplicate 'for my birthday'. Punctuation and sentence boundaries help clarity. Suggestion: Always use an article (a/an/the) for singular countable nouns and proofread for word choice and repetition.

× I mean I really love this one because it's make me feel so free when I ride it around.

✓ I mean I really loved it because it made me feel so free when I rode it around.

Tense inconsistency: speaker recounting a past experience should use past simple, not present. 'It's make' is ungrammatical; use 'it made me feel' and 'when I rode' (past simple). Suggestion: Keep past narration in past tense consistently (subject + past verb form). Also use 'it' or 'that' appropriately.

× Now I did not at all uh, maybe as my child, the bicycle was very popular, but now you know, it has many motorbike uh, the cars also many people love to uh use the bicycle. No, not anymore they love to use the.

✓ Now I do not at all. Maybe when I was a child, bicycles were very popular, but now there are many motorbikes and cars, and fewer people love to use bicycles. No, not anymore; they prefer to use motorbikes or cars.

Multiple tense and structure errors: 'I did not' should be 'I do not' for present, but speaker contrasts past and present so use 'when I was a child' (past). Subject-verb agreement: 'bicycle was' → 'bicycles were' (plural generalization). Use 'there are' for existence (there be issue). 'It has many motorbike' incorrect: use 'there are many motorbikes and cars'. 'The cars also many people love to use the bicycle' is scrambled; reorganize into clear clauses. Suggestion: Separate sentences, maintain correct tense for time references, use plural nouns for general statements and 'there are' for existence, and ensure clear subject-verb order.