Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g. “taking it with taking a ride” and “delighted gift”). Use past tense consistently and natural collocations like “toy bike,” “ride my bike,” and “best gift.”

Exemplo: Yes. I received a toy bike from my parents for my seventh birthday. After that I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon, and I remember feeling very happy because it was my first real bike.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g. “more popular,” “there is more enthusiasm for bikes,” “for commuting”). Avoid vague phrases like “much popular” and “craze.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people prefer motorcycles and scooters for commuting because they are cheaper and easier to park, and younger people especially enjoy them as a trendy, practical option.

× Yes, when I was a child I got a gift from my parents on my 7th birthday.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I received a gift from my parents on my seventh birthday.

The original uses 'got' which is informal but not wrong for past tense; however 'received' is more natural in this context. Also write numbers under ten in words for formal writing: 'seventh'. Ensure past simple tense is used consistently for a completed past event.

× It was a toy bike and I used to roam each and everywhere, taking it with taking a ride on a bike and it was so good and delighted gift for me.

✓ It was a toy bike and I used to ride it everywhere; it was a delightful gift for me.

The original sentence is wordy and ungrammatical. 'Used to roam each and everywhere' is incorrect: use 'used to ride it everywhere' to match the intended meaning. Remove redundant phrase 'taking it with taking a ride on a bike'. Replace 'so good and delighted gift' with 'a delightful gift' because 'delighted' is an adjective describing a person, not the gift. Use past habitual 'used to' correctly and simplify sentence structure for clarity.

× Yes, whether it is about a toy bike or a bike which usually people ride on a street.

✓ Yes, whether it is a toy bike or a bicycle that people usually ride on the street,

The phrase 'whether it is about' is awkward; use 'whether it is a' to introduce alternatives. 'Bike which usually people ride on a street' has incorrect word order: use 'a bicycle that people usually ride on the street.' Also 'bike' can be replaced with 'bicycle' for formality. Keep relative clause order correct: 'a bicycle that people usually ride on the street.'

× It is much popular as nowadays more craze is about the bike rather than riding a car.

✓ It is very popular nowadays because there is more enthusiasm for bikes than for cars.

'Much popular' is incorrect; use 'very popular' or 'quite popular.' 'More craze is about the bike' is unidiomatic; use 'more enthusiasm for bikes.' Also compare correctly: 'than for cars' rather than 'rather than riding a car.' Use 'nowadays' position after subject or at start: 'It is very popular nowadays.'