Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details in order using linking words. Avoid fillers and incomplete sentences; finish the story or stop at a clear end. Also use correct tense and pronouns (e.g., "we used it together" not "ride it to like together").

Exemplo: I did. My father gave a bike to my brother and me when we were children. We often rode it together around our neighborhood, sometimes with one of us sitting on the back. Once we fell off when trying to go too fast, but we were not seriously hurt and laughed about it afterwards.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence, then support with specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "mediocre age" and awkward fillers. Use consistent verb forms and clearer timing words ("in the morning or evening"). You can add brief examples or comparisons to strengthen your answer.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, people of all ages—children, adults and seniors—use bicycles for exercise and short trips. As a result, you can see many people cycling in parks in the morning or commuting by bike in the evening.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and the bike was gifted by my father and he gifted that bike to both my brother and me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was a gift from my father, and he gave that bike to both my brother and me.

The original uses passive 'was gifted by' and then repeats 'he gifted' which is wordy. Use simple past 'was a gift from' and 'gave' to be natural in past narration. Also replace the conjunctions and punctuation to avoid a run-on sentence. Grammar problem type ID:5

× We used to ride it to like together.

✓ We used to ride it together.

The phrase 'to like' is incorrect here. 'Used to' followed by base verb 'ride' is correct. Remove 'to like' which is extraneous and ungrammatical. Grammar problem type ID:9

× I used to sit at back and sometimes he used to sit back and uh.

✓ I used to sit at the back and sometimes he sat behind me.

Use 'sit at the back' requires article 'the' and 'sometimes he used to sit back' is repetitive; 'he sat behind me' is clearer. Maintain past habitual with 'used to' or simple past consistently. Grammar problem type ID:9

× So one day we fall down and.

✓ So one day we fell down.

The event is past, so use past tense 'fell' not present 'fall'. Also remove the trailing 'and' which leaves the sentence incomplete. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and everyone, whether it is a senior citizen or a child or a mediocre age, everyone loves to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country; everyone, whether a senior citizen, a child, or a person of middle age, loves to ride a bike.

'Mediocre age' is incorrect usage; use 'middle age' or 'a person of middle age'. Also remove repetition of 'everyone' and fix punctuation for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Whenever they feel like OK, we need to do exercise, they ride it in the morning or in at evening.

✓ Whenever they feel like they need to exercise, they ride in the morning or in the evening.

The clause 'feel like OK, we need to do exercise' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'feel like they need to exercise'. Also 'in at evening' is incorrect; use 'in the evening' or 'in the morning'. Remove the pronoun 'it' after 'ride' when meaning 'ride a bike'. Grammar problem type ID:11