Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and directly responds, but it has repetition, minor grammar issues, and could be more natural and concise. Aim for one strong topic sentence, correct tense and phrasing, and one or two brief supporting details. Use linking words only if needed. For example, replace “when I was when I was a child” with “when I was a child” and say “for my eighth birthday” instead of “in my 8 year old birthday.”

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle when I was a child; my father bought it for my eighth birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon.

Sugestão: Your idea is understandable but delivery is hesitant and grammar is incorrect in places. Organize your answer: start with a clear opinion, then give two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and correct phrasing: say “motorbikes are more common” and “bicycles are less convenient in heavy traffic.” Be specific: mention commuting, distance, or weather if relevant.

Exemplo: I don’t think bicycles are very popular. Instead, motorbikes are far more common because people commute longer distances and need faster transport. Moreover, bicycles are impractical in heavy traffic and on busy roads, so most people prefer motorbikes.

× Definitely yes. I used to have a bicycle when I was when I was a child.

✓ Definitely yes. I used to have a bicycle when I was a child.

The sentence repeats 'when I was' which is a redundancy and causes awkward structure. Remove the duplicate phrase to make the sentence grammatically correct and clearer. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and read the sentence aloud to catch repetition.

× That bike was bought by my father for me in my 8 year old birthday.

✓ That bike was bought by my father for me on my eighth birthday.

Use the preposition 'on' for days and specific dates and use the ordinal adjective 'eighth' instead of '8 year old' before 'birthday'. Also write numbers as words in formal speech. Suggestion: use 'on' with days/occasions and use ordinal forms for birthdays (e.g., on my tenth birthday).

× Uh, maybe not that would be uh, price.

✓ Uh, maybe not; it would be because of the price.

The original fragment is unclear and lacks proper structure. You need a clause connector and correct noun phrase: 'because of the price' explains the reason. Suggestion: use 'because of' to introduce reasons and avoid sentence fragments.

× That would be motorbike will be the more common in my country.

✓ Motorbikes are more common in my country.

The original mixes conditional 'would be' with future 'will be' and uses singular 'motorbike' oddly. For a general fact use simple present and plural subject: 'Motorbikes are more common.' Also remove unnecessary modal verbs. Suggestion: use simple present for general truths and match plural subject with plural noun.

× I think that because people, they are really busy, so, uh, bicycle is not really convenient in the traffic jam.

✓ I think that because people are really busy, bicycles are not very convenient in traffic jams.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'people'; remove it. Use plural 'bicycles' to refer to the general class and plural 'traffic jams' or uncountable 'traffic' without 'the'. Also 'not really convenient' can be smoothed to 'not very convenient.' Suggestion: avoid repeating subject pronouns and use plural nouns for general statements; use 'traffic' or 'traffic jams' appropriately.