Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove repetitions and correct tense and possessive errors. Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas. For example: “Yes, I did. My father gave me a bright red bike when I was about seven, and I used it every day to visit friends and explore my neighborhood.” This shows correct past tense, ownership (my father), and specific details.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bright red bike when I was about seven, and I rode it every day to visit friends and explore the neighborhood.

Sugestão: Answer directly, use clear grammar, and provide specific reasons and an example. Begin with a topic sentence like “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Then give two supporting reasons linked with connectors (because, for example, and) and finish with a concise example. Correct word order (people use bikes) and avoid trailing off. For instance: “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap, convenient for short trips, and good for exercise; for example, many office workers cycle to the subway station instead of driving.”

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short commutes, and many people prefer cycling to the subway station instead of driving.

× Well yes I I have a bike when I was a little kid and this bike is is as a gift and given by my father's.

✓ Well, yes. I had a bike when I was a little kid; it was a gift given by my father.

Problems identified: 5 (Past tense issue), 22 (Article errors), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions), 26 (Sentence structure), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns/possessive). The student mixes present tense 'have' with past time reference 'when I was a little kid' so past tense 'had' is required. 'This bike is is as a gift and given by my father's' is ungrammatical: reduce repetition ('is is'), use passive correctly ('it was a gift given by my father') or active ('my father gave it to me'). Avoid using father's with an apostrophe alone; use 'my father' for the agent or 'my father's' only with a noun following (for example, 'my father's gift'). Suggestion: choose past tense consistently, remove duplicated words, and use correct possessive or active voice to show who gave the gift.

× Well, I think have a bike in our country is really common occasion because nowadays many people on will use the bikes for a commute even they have a car because.

✓ Well, I think having a bike in our country is very common because nowadays many people use bikes to commute even if they have a car.

Problems identified: 6 (Present tense issue), 8 (Verb + -ing form), 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions), 26 (Sentence structure), 16 (Incorrect conjunction use). 'I think have a bike' requires a gerund: 'I think having a bike'. 'Is really common occasion' is awkward; use 'is very common' and drop 'occasion'. 'Many people on will use the bikes for a commute' has extra words and wrong word order: use 'many people use bikes to commute'. 'Even they have a car' needs a conditional connector 'even if they have a car'. Suggestion: use gerund after 'think', simplify noun phrases, place verbs in correct order, and use 'even if' for contrast.