Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct with a clear topic sentence, avoid unnecessary hesitation, and use one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Keep it under five sentences. For example, start with a clear statement about whether you had a bike, then add one specific memory and a brief reason or feeling using linking words (e.g., “but,” “so,” “because”).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child. However, my older brother rode his bike every day, so I spent many afternoons watching him and wishing I could join him. Because we lived on a busy street, my parents felt it was unsafe for me to ride alone.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct opinion first, then support it with two concise, specific reasons connected by linking words. Correct grammar and word order (subject-verb agreement) and replace fillers like “MMM.” Mention one example or contrast to strengthen your point.

Exemplo: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Thailand. Firstly, there are few dedicated bike lanes, so cycling on busy roads can be dangerous. Secondly, the hot climate and heavy traffic mean many people prefer motorbikes or cars instead.

× I'm not completely sure but I don't remember having my own bike as a child.

✓ I'm not completely sure, but I don't remember having my own bike when I was a child.

The sentence mix of 'as a child' is acceptable but 'when I was a child' is clearer and matches the past time reference. This is a present tense statement about a past event; use a time clause that clearly indicates past time. Suggest adding a comma before 'but' to improve sentence flow.

× I do remember my older brother, he used to ride a bike a lot and I would like to watch him and wish I could join him.

✓ I do remember my older brother; he used to ride a bike a lot, and I liked to watch him and wished I could join him.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and tense consistency. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habitual action for the brother. For the speaker's past feelings, use past forms 'liked' and 'wished' rather than present 'would like' or 'wish'. Also replace the comma splice with a semicolon or separate sentences. This ensures consistent past tense and correct past participle usage.

× MMM I don't think so because I'm from Thailand and is not easy to ride the bike in Thailand pedestrian rather than walk because we don't have a lane for.

✓ Hmm, I don't think so. I'm from Thailand, and it's not easy to ride a bike there because sidewalks are for pedestrians and we don't have bike lanes.

This sentence has several structural errors: missing subject in 'is not easy' (should be 'it's not easy'), awkward phrasing 'ride the bike in Thailand pedestrian rather than walk', and an incomplete clause 'we don't have a lane for.' Break into two sentences, supply the missing subject 'it', use 'bike' without 'the', clarify that sidewalks are for pedestrians, and state 'bike lanes' as the missing infrastructure. This corrects sentence structure and makes the meaning clear.