Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more direct and concise, use a clear topic sentence, correct tense and vocabulary, avoid filler words, and add one brief supporting detail with a linking word. Also correct small errors (e.g., "riding 1" → "riding it").

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. We briefly owned one, but after my mother had an accident while riding it, we gave it away, so I never learned to ride.

Sugestão: Start with a clear, direct opinion, use correct subject-verb agreement and verb forms, avoid repetition, and include a concise reason with a linking word. Fix grammar mistakes (e.g., "likes"→"like", "riding bike"→"riding bikes", "owed"→"owned", "donate"→"donated").

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, both men and women often use bikes to commute to work or run errands, but I personally avoid them because my family stopped using our bike after my mother’s accident.

× No, I never had a bike when we were kids because, uh, my mother got into an accident while riding 1.

✓ No, I never had a bike when I was a child because my mother had an accident while riding.

The original sentence mixes plural 'we' with the earlier question about 'you' and uses awkward phrasing 'riding 1'. Use 'I was a child' to match the examiner's question and simple past 'had' and 'had an accident' or 'got into an accident' are both acceptable; 'had an accident' is more neutral. Remove the stray '1' and filler words for clarity. Suggestion: Keep subject consistent with the question (singular 'I') and avoid stray characters or fillers.

× So I mean, we did have a bike but we just gave it away because of the accident.

✓ We did have a bike, but we gave it away because of the accident.

The phrase 'So I mean' is an informal filler and 'we did have' plus 'we just gave' is redundant; simplify to maintain clear past tense. Use a comma before 'but'. Ensure tense consistency (simple past) throughout the sentence. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary fillers and keep consistent simple past verbs.

× Well, yeah, but it's really popular in my country.

✓ Well, yeah, bikes are really popular in my country.

The pronoun 'it' is unclear; use the plural noun 'bikes' to match 'popular' in context. 'Are' is required for plural subject. This clarifies the topic and maintains subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: Use a clear subject that matches number and verb.

× Both men and women likes riding bike.

✓ Both men and women like riding bikes.

With a compound subject 'men and women' the verb must be plural 'like', not 'likes'. Also use the plural noun 'bikes' or the gerund phrase 'riding bikes' to sound natural. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with the compound subject and use plural noun for general activities.

× It is cool to them.

✓ They think it's cool.

'It is cool to them' is unnatural phrasing. Use 'They think it's cool' to express opinion. Also contract 'it is' to 'it's' for natural speech if appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'think' or 'find' plus a clause to express opinions.

× And personally I don't like bikes that much because I've never had one when I was a kid.

✓ Personally, I don't like bikes that much because I never had one when I was a child.

Mixing present perfect 'I've never had' with a past time expression 'when I was a kid' is inappropriate; the simple past 'I never had one' should be used for past time references. Also match 'when I was a child' to earlier phrasing. Add a comma after 'Personally' for clarity. Suggestion: Use simple past when referring to a specific past time period.

× I mean, we did have one.

✓ We did have one.

The filler 'I mean' can be omitted for clarity. The sentence itself is fine in past tense; removing the filler improves formality and clarity. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary fillers in responses for clearer speech.

× My mother owed it and after her accident we donate.

✓ My mother owned it, and after her accident we donated it.

'Owed' is the past of 'owe' and does not mean 'own'. The correct past tense of 'own' is 'owned'. 'We donate' is present tense and incorrect for the past context; use simple past 'we donated'. Also include the object 'it' after 'donated' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct verb 'own' -> 'owned' and keep tense consistent (simple past) for past events.