Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise, correct grammar, and avoid hesitations or irrelevant phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and word choice (e.g., “gave me on my fourth birthday,” not “gifted me back”); remove unrelated fragments like “You donate?”

Exemplo: Yes. My father gave me a small red and black bike for my fourth birthday. It had training wheels, which helped me learn to ride quickly, and I remember practicing in our backyard every evening until I could ride without help.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure, use linking words, and provide specific examples. Begin with a clear statement, then explain reasons and give concrete examples. Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., “people of all ages”). Use one or two linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “such as.”

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many children ride bikes for fun, teenagers use them to go to school, and older people prefer cycling for exercise and short errands.

× Yes, when I was a child my father gifted me back on my 4th birthday, uh, it was red in color, uh, with black. You donate?

✓ Yes. When I was a child my father gifted me a bike on my fourth birthday. It was red with black.

The original sentence uses informal and incorrect word order and some wrong word choices. 'Gifted me back on my 4th birthday' is incorrect; use 'gifted me a bike on my fourth birthday' to indicate the object and time. 'Was red in color, uh, with black' is wordy; use 'It was red with black.' Also remove 'You donate?' which is unrelated and incorrect in context. Keep past tense consistent when describing past events. Suggestion: Simplify into two clear past-tense sentences and remove filler words.

× Yes I'm bikes are extremely popular in my country from child to old age people use bikes for different purpose.

✓ Yes, bikes are extremely popular in my country; people of all ages use them for different purposes.

The original sentence has incorrect structure: 'Yes I'm bikes' is ungrammatical and contains an extra 'I'm.' The phrase 'from child to old age people' is awkward; use 'people of all ages.' 'Use bikes for different purpose' has a singular 'purpose' and lacks object pronoun agreement. Correct to 'use them for different purposes.' Maintain present tense for general statements.

× For example people I use bike to enjoy and learn its riding and old people and teenager.

✓ For example, some people use bikes for enjoyment and to learn how to ride, including older adults and teenagers.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and word order: 'people I use bike' is incorrect; remove the stray 'I.' 'Learn its riding' is unnatural; use 'learn how to ride.' 'Old people and teenager' mixes plural/singular and is awkward; change to 'older adults and teenagers.' Also add commas and articles as needed for clarity and parallel structure.