Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Grammar and naturalness: use past tense consistently and correct verb forms. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition. For example, say when you had the bike and a short detail about how you used it.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was eight and rode it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day. Riding my bike helped me feel independent and made it easy to meet friends after class.

Sugestão: Clarity and specificity: avoid repetition and awkward phrasing. Begin with a clear opinion, then provide specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also"). Mention different groups who use bikes and situations where bikes are common to add concreteness.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short journeys and leisure. For example, children often ride to school and adults cycle to nearby shops or work. Also, cycling is inexpensive compared with driving, which makes it a practical choice for many families.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used the present tense 'have' with the past time expression 'when I was a child'. This is a tense mismatch. Use the past simple 'had' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for completed actions in the past (I had, I lived, I went).

× Yes, its popular bike is popular in our country because every child has a bicycle, especially those who are able to afford it.

✓ Yes, bicycles are popular in our country because every child has a bicycle, especially those who can afford one.

The original sentence uses 'its popular bike is popular' which is ungrammatical and repeats 'popular'. 'Its' is an incorrect possessive pronoun here because there is no clear singular antecedent; also 'those who are able to afford it' uses 'it' to refer to 'bicycle' but mismatches plural/singular. Revised sentence uses plural 'bicycles' and simplifies the structure, and replaces 'are able to afford it' with 'can afford one' for naturalness and correct pronoun reference. Suggestion: avoid redundant words, ensure pronouns clearly match their antecedents and number.