Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar errors (e.g., "we were two years apart" or "we had a two-year age gap"). Avoid redundancy like repeating "child" and tighten phrasing.

Exemplo: No, I didn't have my own bike. However, my brother did and, because we were only two years apart, I often borrowed his bike and spent many afternoons riding it around the neighborhood.

Sugestão: Organize your response with a clear main idea, then give specific reasons and one short example. Use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'because', 'for example'). Fix repetition and grammar: say "more popular in the past," and avoid repeating words like "home." Keep to 2–3 sentences and include a prediction or comparison for depth.

Exemplo: Bikes were more popular in the past, but their use has declined recently. For example, many children now stay indoors playing video games, so fewer kids learn to cycle; consequently, cycling is less common among the younger generation.

× I'm afraid I didn't have a bike, however my brother had a bike when he was a child and we just have two years age gap so I used to play with his bike a lot, maybe more than him.

✓ I'm afraid I didn't have a bike; however, my brother had one when he was a child and we were only two years apart in age, so I used to play with his bike a lot, perhaps more than he did.

Errors: inconsistent tense forms and awkward phrasing. 'We just have two years age gap' is present tense and incorrect word order; it should be past tense 'we were only two years apart in age' to match the past context. 'Maybe more than him' is incorrect pronoun case and lacks a verb—use 'perhaps more than he did.' Use a semicolon or period before 'however' and add commas for clarity. Suggestions: keep past narrative consistently in past tense, use correct comparative pronoun forms, and fix word order for 'apart in age.'

× I think bikes were more popular in past.

✓ I think bikes were more popular in the past.

Error: missing definite article 'the' before 'past.' The phrase 'in the past' is the correct time expression. Keep present tense 'I think' to express the speaker's opinion about a general trend.

× Children used to ride bikes often and summer summer days and play outside a lot and I as a kid used to do that too.

✓ Children used to ride bikes often on summer days and play outside a lot, and I, as a kid, used to do that too.

Errors: repeated word 'summer', missing preposition 'on' before 'summer days', run-on sentence with repeated 'and'. Also need commas around 'as a kid' as a parenthetical. Suggestions: remove duplication, add 'on', and use commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× But nowadays new generation kids spend more time at home, at home using computers and video games.

✓ But nowadays the new generation of kids spend more time at home using computers and playing video games.

Errors: repetition 'at home, at home', missing article 'the' before 'new generation', and parallel structure: 'using computers and playing video games' is clearer. Also 'new generation kids' is better as 'the new generation of kids.' Ensure verb agreement with subject (see next suggestion).

× But nowadays new generation kids spend more time at home, at home using computers and video games.

✓ But nowadays the new generation of kids spends more time at home using computers and playing video games.

Error: subject-verb agreement. 'The new generation' is a singular noun phrase, so it takes 'spends' rather than 'spend.' Alternatively, use 'kids spend' if making 'kids' the subject. Suggestion: choose a singular subject with singular verb ('the new generation...spends') or plural subject with plural verb ('kids spend').

× So cycling has become less.

✓ So cycling has decreased in popularity.

Error: 'has become less' is incomplete and vague—'less' needs to modify a noun or be part of a comparative phrase. Use 'decreased in popularity' to clearly express decline. Maintain present perfect 'has decreased' to indicate a change up to the present.