Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Используйте простое и правильное грамматическое время, чтобы ясно выразить идею. Начинайте с прямого утверждения (topic sentence), затем добавьте одно-два конкретных поддерживающих деталя (возраст, кто подарил, как часто вы ездили). Избегайте повторов и звуковых пауз («uh»). Поправьте порядок слов и формы глаголов: вместо «I had since I have since I had seven years old» скажите «I got a bike when I was seven» или «I had a bike from the age of seven».

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it as a birthday present from my parents when I was seven, and I used to ride it almost every summer with my friends.

Sugestão: Дайте чёткое мнение в начале, затем приведите 1–2 конкретные причины, используя связки (because, so, however). Говорите полными предложениями и корректно используйте времена и формы глаголов (например, 'people prefer to drive cars or take the metro'). Избегайте числовых неформальностей («5050») — скажите «about half» или «not very popular».

Exemplo: I think bicycles are only moderately popular in my country. Because of the hot climate and good public transport, many people prefer to drive cars or take the metro rather than cycle, so bike use is not very common.

× Of course I had since I have since I had seven years old.

✓ Of course I did; I have had a bike since I was seven years old.

The original mixes past simple and present perfect incorrectly and uses an incorrect age construction. Use 'have had' or 'have had since' for possession continuing to present; to state the age when it started, use 'since I was seven years old'. Also use 'did' as an auxiliary for short affirmative response in past context or restructure to present perfect for continuing possession. Suggestion: decide whether you mean past possession (I had a bike) or continuing possession (I have had a bike since I was seven). Use 'was' with ages, not 'had'.

× My parents give me a gift for my birthday and, uh, every summer I still.

✓ My parents gave me a bike as a birthday present, and I still ride it every summer.

The sentence uses present tense 'give' instead of past 'gave' for a past event and ends with an incomplete clause 'every summer I still'. Correct to past simple for the gift: 'gave me a present'. Clarify what continues: 'I still ride it every summer' uses present simple to indicate habitual action. Also specify 'a bike' to be clear. Recommend restructuring to two clauses joined by 'and'.

× I think 5050 because of, uh, because of, uh, our weather, people prefer more to have a car or uh, took a metro, maybe bus, but not the bikes.

✓ I think it's about fifty-fifty. Because of our weather and other reasons, people prefer to have a car or take the metro or bus rather than ride bikes.

The original is disfluent and mixes forms: '5050' should be 'fifty-fifty' or 'about 50/50', and 'people prefer more to have' is awkward. Use 'prefer to have a car' or 'prefer to take the metro/bus'. 'Took a metro' is past tense and incorrect here; use 'take'. Use 'rather than' to contrast with bikes. Improve cohesion by splitting into two sentences and removing filler 'uh'.