Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct tense consistency. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, I mean) and repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. It was a small pink bike with tassels and removable training wheels. When I learned to ride, I took the training wheels off, and since then I’ve continued to enjoy cycling for fun and exercise.

Sugestão: Answer directly then give specific reasons using clear linking words. Remove hesitation and unclear phrasing (‘umm’, ‘you know’, ‘like her’). Use one or two concrete examples or statistics if possible.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short journeys. For example, many students and workers prefer motorcycles or scooters to avoid traffic and save money on fuel and fares.

× It was pink in colour, it was, it had tassels and it has the training wheels.

✓ It was pink in colour; it had tassels and training wheels.

The sentence mixes past tense (was, had) with present tense (has). Use consistent past tense because the speaker is describing a childhood bike. Remove repeated 'it' and the definite article before 'training wheels' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same tense and streamline repeated subjects.

× Well, I lost the training wheels when once I learnt how to ride the bike and after that as well.

✓ I lost the training wheels when I learned how to ride the bike, and after that I continued riding without them.

The phrase 'when once I learnt' is redundant; use either 'when' or 'once'. Also 'after that as well' is awkward. Use simple past 'learned' (or 'learnt' British) and a clear follow-up clause. Maintain consistent tense and clarity.

× I mean even till date I do really enjoy riding the bike.

✓ I still really enjoy riding a bike to this day.

'Till date' is nonstandard in conversational English; use 'to this day' or 'still'. 'I do really enjoy' is permissible for emphasis but word order is more natural as 'I still really enjoy'. Use article 'a' before 'bike' for general reference.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country as UMM.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country.

The filler 'UMM' is spoken hesitation, not appropriate in written correction. Remove it. The sentence is otherwise fine.

× It is also one of the primary modes of transportation wherein you know, if someone is like her, they may not be able to, you know, afford anything.

✓ They are also one of the primary modes of transportation because some people may not be able to afford other options.

The original mixes pronouns and awkward phrasing: 'it' referring to 'bikes' (plural) should be 'they'. 'Wherein' is formal and odd here; use 'because'. 'If someone is like her' is unclear and incorrect; use 'some people'. Remove discourse fillers. Ensure subject-verb agreement (they are).

× So apart from public transports, bikes, bikes are still very commonly used in my country.

✓ So apart from public transport, bikes are still very commonly used in my country.

Use 'public transport' (uncountable) rather than 'public transports'. Remove the repeated 'bikes, bikes'. This fixes redundancy and corrects the noun form.