Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix tense and article errors and avoid unnecessary repetition. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved cycling and used it to visit friends and explore my neighborhood. However, while I was learning to ride, I once fell and hurt my arm, which made me more careful afterward.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to present two distinct reasons. Correct grammar (plural nouns, articles) and make details specific (who, where, examples). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. On the one hand, many people use them because cars are expensive and public transport can be unreliable; on the other hand, others cycle for exercise and to avoid traffic in busy cities.

× Yes, I have a bike since I was child because I love cycling and I also got hurt while practicing learning how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I loved cycling, and I also got hurt while learning how to ride a bike.

The student used present tense 'have' and 'love' but the question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used ('had', 'loved'). Also 'since I was child' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child'. 'Practicing learning how to ride a bike' is redundant; use 'learning how to ride a bike' or 'practicing riding a bike'. Improve by matching past tense for actions that occurred in childhood and simplify redundant phrases. Suggested fixes: change present verbs to past (have→had, love→loved), replace 'since I was child' with 'when I was a child', and remove redundancy ('practicing learning'→'learning').

× Yes, bike is popular in my country because some cannot afford to buy a car and they some also want to have a healthy lifestyle so they ride a bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because some people cannot afford to buy a car and some also want to have a healthy lifestyle, so they ride bikes.

The student used singular 'bike is' when speaking generally; use plural 'bikes are' to refer to bikes in general. Also 'some' needs a noun ('some people'), and 'they some also' is word order error; use 'some also' or 'they also'. Repetition 'ride a bike' can be pluralized to match 'people' ('ride bikes'). Improve by using plural forms for general statements and adding missing noun after 'some'.