Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Organize your answer into a clear topic sentence and 1–2 supporting details. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases (e.g., “gave me return from military service” is confusing). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “because,” “so,” “after that”), and keep the response under five sentences. Also add a specific detail (age, color of bike, memories) to make it more vivid.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was about seven, my father returned from military service and gifted me a small red bike with training wheels. Because I lived in a quiet neighborhood, I spent afternoons riding up and down the street with my friends, and those rides were some of my happiest childhood memories.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer to the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting reasons or examples. Use linking words such as “however,” “for example,” or “because” to create coherence. Avoid vague phrases like “not meant for me”; instead, explain why (e.g., lack of practice, busy schedule). Add a brief prediction or comparison if possible.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country. For example, many people cycle to work or for exercise, and several of my office colleagues commute by bike. However, I didn't cycle much growing up because I was busy with school, although I now try to ride occasionally for fitness.

× Umm, when I was young, my father gave me return from military service during that time and then he gifted me with a small bike with his training wheels on it.

✓ Umm, when I was young, my father returned from military service during that time and then he gifted me a small bike with training wheels on it.

The original sentence incorrectly mixes 'gave me return from military service' which is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is that the father returned from military service (past tense of 'return') and then gifted the speaker a bike. Use 'returned from military service' to describe the father's action, and 'gifted me a small bike' or 'gifted me a bike with training wheels' to express giving. Also remove 'his' before 'training wheels' because the wheels belong to the bike, not necessarily to the father. Suggestion: separate events chronologically: 'My father returned from military service, and then he gifted me a small bike with training wheels.'

× I had a really great time with it, riding it through our neighborhood so.

✓ I had a really great time riding it through our neighborhood.

The original sentence ends with an unnecessary 'so' and uses a redundant comma. The phrase 'had a really great time riding it through our neighborhood' is a clear, grammatically correct structure. Remove the trailing 'so' which is informal and incomplete here. Keep verb forms consistent: 'had' (past) and 'riding' (participial) to describe the experience.

× I do actually, my office mates do ride bikes but I guess growing up it's not meant for me so I didn't join them.

✓ I do, actually; my office mates ride bikes, but I guess growing up it wasn't meant for me, so I didn't join them.

Tense consistency is needed. 'Growing up' refers to the past period, so use past tense 'wasn't meant for me' rather than present 'it's not meant for me'. Also simplify 'do ride' to 'ride' unless emphasizing. Add punctuation to separate clauses. Suggestion: 'I do, actually; my office mates ride bikes, but I guess growing up it wasn't for me, so I didn't join them.'

× I'm not as active as I want to be but I do like to try it sometimes.

✓ I'm not as active as I would like to be, but I do like to try it sometimes.

Use the conditional/modal structure 'would like to' to express desire or preference relative to the present. 'As I want to be' is not idiomatic here. The rest of the sentence is correct; keep 'do like to try it sometimes' for emphasis.