Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then provide 1–2 specific supporting details (age, how you learned, time it took). Use correct tense and plural/singular forms, and link ideas with simple connectors (e.g. "then", "after"). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes. I got my first bike when I was about ten; my parents bought it for me. At first I didn’t know how to ride, so I practiced every evening and I could ride well after about a year.

Sugestão: Answer directly and support with accurate, specific reasons. Avoid filler phrases like "you know". Use correct facts or state them approximately (e.g. "millions"). Explain why bikes are popular with 1–2 clear reasons and a linking word (e.g. "because", "so"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are still very popular in China because they are affordable and convenient for short trips in crowded cities. For many people, owning a car is expensive, so cycling remains a common way to commute.

× Yes, when about 10 years old at the time my parents bought me a bike and at the time still don't know how to ride a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was about 10 years old my parents bought me a bike, and at that time I still didn't know how to ride it.

Multiple tense and missing subject errors: the sentence refers to a past event so use past tense 'was' for age and 'didn't know' for ability in the past. Add the subject 'I' before 'was' and 'didn't' and replace 'at the time' duplicate with a single phrase. Use 'ride it' to refer to the bike (pronoun) to avoid repetition.

× So I learned it every night and I get a progress after one years later.

✓ So I practiced every night and I made progress after one year.

The original mixes simple past and present and uses incorrect verbs and pluralization. 'Learned it every night' is awkward for acquiring a skill; 'practiced every night' is more natural. Use past tense 'made progress' for a past result and correct 'one years' to 'one year'. Also remove 'later' because 'after one year' already conveys the time frame.

× Well, you know, bikes are definitely popular in my country because you know in China we have 1,000,000 of people and at that time a car is too luxury for ordinary people, so riding bike is their common transport.

✓ Well, you know, bikes are definitely popular in my country because in China we have 1,000,000 people, and at that time a car was too much of a luxury for ordinary people, so riding a bike was their common mode of transport.

Several errors: '1,000,000 of people' should be '1,000,000 people' (no 'of'). 'A car is too luxury' mixes present tense and incorrect adjective usage; use past tense 'was' and the phrase 'too much of a luxury'. 'Riding bike' needs an article 'a bike', and 'common transport' is better expressed as 'common mode of transport'. Ensure past tense 'was' to match 'at that time'.