Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid unnecessary words (e.g., “just”, “only”), and use a linking phrase to give a specific supporting detail (who gave it, how much pleasure it brought, where you rode it). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and correct tense and prepositions.

Exemplo: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandmother bought it for me for 500 pesos, and I loved riding it. I used to cycle around our neighborhood, Warangai, every afternoon because it was fun and gave me freedom to explore.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and then give two specific reasons with a linking word to connect them. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “cost-effective”, “environmentally friendly”) and avoid repetition. Mention an example or brief comparison to make your point more concrete.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cost-effective and help save fuel. Moreover, cycling is environmentally friendly, so many people choose bikes for short trips. For example, commuters often cycle to work to avoid traffic and reduce transport costs.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past: 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' The student used present tense 'have' which mismatches timeframe. Use past simple 'had' to match the past reference. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time expression (when I was a child -> use past simple).

× When I was a child, my grandmother gave it to me and she just bought it for only 500 pesos, where I enjoyed so much I had to visit places around our Warangai.

✓ When I was a child, my grandmother gave it to me; she had bought it for only 500 pesos, and I enjoyed it so much that I visited places around our Warangai.

This sentence has several issues: verb tense consistency, article/word choice, and sentence structure. 'She just bought it' (present perfect/simple present) should be past perfect or simple past 'had bought' or 'bought' to show earlier purchase relative to 'gave'. 'For only 500 pesos' is fine, but 'just' is unnecessary. 'Where I enjoyed so much I had to visit places' is ungrammatical: 'where' is incorrect connector and 'so much I had to' is awkward. Use 'and I enjoyed it so much that I visited places' to show result. Also include a semicolon or conjunction to split ideas. Suggestion: keep past tense sequence, use 'that' for result clauses, and place objects/pronouns clearly (enjoyed it).

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because we are saving money and fuel.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because they save money and fuel.

The original mixes general present opinion with progressive 'we are saving', which is awkward for a general fact. Use simple present to state facts: 'bikes save money and fuel.' Also 'we are saving' implies ongoing specific action by the speaker; 'they save' refers to bikes generally. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual or general truths; match subject ('bikes') and verb ('save').

× In this economy, saving is one of the most important things to do.

✓ In this economy, saving money is one of the most important things to do.

The phrase 'saving' is vague; specify 'saving money' to clarify what is being saved. The rest of the sentence is acceptable. Suggestion: add the object after the gerund to make the meaning clear.

× We get to explore places with just minimal cost.

✓ We can explore places at minimal cost.

'Get to explore' is informal and 'with just minimal cost' is awkward prepositional use. Use modal 'can' for ability or possibility, and 'at minimal cost' is the natural collocation. Suggestion: prefer 'can explore' or 'are able to explore' and 'at minimal cost' for clearer, more natural phrasing.