Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and incorrect grammar (use “when I was about six years old”). Aim for 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if you add a detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I did. I started learning to ride a bike when I was about six years old, and within a few months I could ride confidently around my neighborhood.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and accuracy: give a clear opinion, explain reasons with specific examples, and avoid repetition and fillers. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and correct word choice (e.g., "take buses" or "drive cars" instead of "take bags"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: It used to be more popular when I was young; however, I think it has become less common now because many people prefer to drive cars or take public transport to work. For example, in my city, new bike lanes are rare and most commuters use buses or taxis.

× Uh, so I started to learn how to ride a bike about, uh, six years old, I think.

✓ I started to learn how to ride a bike at about six years old, I think.

The sentence uses an age expression incorrectly. When indicating the age at which something happened, use 'at' before the age (preposition error related to time). Also 'about' should directly modify the age: 'at about six years old'. This fits present/past time context: keep 'started' (past) and correct the preposition usage to 'at'. Suggestion: use 'I started learning to ride a bike at about six years old.'

× Umm, it was popular, uh, when I was young, but I think it beca it becomes less popular now 'cause, you know, nowadays people just take bags to umm, to work, uh, to work or for entertainment.

✓ It was popular when I was young, but I think it has become less popular now because, you know, nowadays people just take buses to work or for entertainment.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb form 'beca it becomes' appears to be a false start and should be 'has become' to link past state to present change (present perfect), which fits the time frame 'was popular... now'. Also 'take bags' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'take buses'. 'Because' is the correct full conjunction rather than 'cause' in formal speech. This addresses tense choice (present perfect) and word choice; suggestion: use 'has become' for changes from past to present and use precise nouns like 'buses'.