Bike— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct the preposition error (“live on a hill” → “live on a hill” is okay but remove extra “in”), and simplify the conditional phrasing. Avoid redundancy (e.g., don’t repeat ‘if I had a bike’).

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. We lived on a steep hill, so my father worried I would fall and hurt myself, so he didn’t allow me to ride one.

Sugestão: Remove Hesitation and incorrect words, use clearer structure and specific examples. Begin with a topic sentence, then add supporting details with linking words (for example, furthermore). Replace unclear phrase “as cats” and avoid filler words like “uh.” Be specific about who uses bikes and for what purposes and limit to up to five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many delivery workers use bicycles to carry food from restaurants, and small business owners use them to transport goods in crowded urban areas.

× We used to live in on a hill and my dad was afraid if I had a bike I would fall down and injure myself.

✓ We used to live on a hill, and my dad was afraid that if I had a bike I would fall and injure myself.

Error type: incorrect use of prepositions and sentence structure. 'Live in on a hill' mixes two prepositions; the correct preposition is 'on' for hill. Also, 'afraid if' is nonstandard; use 'afraid that if' to introduce a clause. 'Fall down' can be shortened to 'fall' without changing meaning. Suggestion: remove the extra preposition, add 'that' after 'afraid', and simplify 'fall down' to 'fall'.

× They're actually very popular and people like to use them not only to enjoy riding them as cats, they use them to, uh, deliver food to other people, like from restaurants, and some people use them for other businesses as well.

✓ They're actually very popular, and people like to use them not only for enjoyment, but also to deliver food from restaurants, and some people use them for other businesses as well.

Error type: incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure. The phrase 'enjoy riding them as cats' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'enjoy riding them' or 'as a pastime'. 'Not only... they use them to' lacks parallel structure; use 'not only... but also...' Suggestion: remove the mistaken 'as cats', use parallel construction 'not only for enjoyment but also to deliver food', and streamline the sentence for clarity.