Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Speak more clearly and give a direct, concise topic sentence first. Avoid repetition and unfinished fragments. State your current status clearly (e.g., "I'm not working at the moment; I recently left my job to study English"). Then add one concise reason or brief background detail. Keep responses under 5 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

Exemplo: I'm not working at the moment; I quit my job six months ago to study English full-time at a language school. Because I wanted to improve my speaking, I practiced English every day while attending classes.

Sugestão: Good direct answer and reason. Improve by tightening language, removing filler words (uh), and using one linking phrase to add a specific example of how home helps (e.g., a dedicated desk or a study routine). Keep it to two or three sentences max.

Exemplo: I usually study at home because it's quiet and comfortable. For example, I have a dedicated desk and a regular routine that helps me concentrate and practice English every day.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence like "Yes, it's a good place to study." Then give one specific reason and a brief supporting detail. Eliminate repeated words and filler sounds.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a good place to study because it's quiet and comfortable. I can study English at home without distractions, which helps me focus better.

Sugestão: Provide a clear direct answer and one concise supporting detail. Avoid fillers and repeated phrases. If saying no, you can briefly explain why and perhaps mention one small improvement if applicable (even if you don't want changes, say why).

Exemplo: No, I wouldn't change it because I'm satisfied with my study environment. I have a dedicated desk and few distractions, so I can concentrate well.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating the plan. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "immersion" or "remedial"? likely meant "intensive" or "massage therapy"); avoid hesitations. Give one or two specific reasons and a brief next step. Use linking words like "because" and "after" correctly.

Exemplo: I plan to study massage therapy in Australia because I want to improve my practical skills through hands-on training. After completing the course, I intend to gain work experience there to build my professional skills.

× I'm not working and I'm I'm not a student because six months ago I attended a language school and practiced English every day.

✓ I'm not working and I'm not a student because six months ago I attended a language school where I practiced English every day.

This sentence has repetition and an unclear clause connection. The student repeated 'I'm' and used 'and practiced English every day' without a clear connector to 'attended a language school.' Combine clauses with 'where' to show the place of practice and remove repeated words. Suggestion: proofread to remove repetitions and use relative clauses for clarity.

× So before before going to. So I quit my job and I, I.

✓ Before that, I quit my job.

This fragment contains repetitions and is incomplete. 'So before before going to.' is not a complete clause and the repeated 'I' is redundant. Condense to a single clear sentence. Suggestion: complete the thought and remove repetitions.

× I usually study at home because it's quiet and comfortable for me.

✓ I usually study at home because it is quiet and comfortable for me.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable in speech, but for clarity in writing expand to 'it is'. No grammatical error other than style; correction keeps tense and meaning. Suggestion: use full forms in formal responses.

× Uh, I can concentrate better on my task or studies which helps me study English every day.

✓ I can concentrate better on my tasks or studies, which helps me study English every day.

Singular/plural consistency: 'task' should be plural 'tasks' or use 'my task' with article. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which helps...' Suggestion: match singular/plural and punctuate clauses.

× Yes, I like I like my my. I like my home because it's a comfortable and quiet so I can study English at home without any distractions.

✓ Yes, I like my home because it is comfortable and quiet, so I can study English there without any distractions.

Multiple problems: repeated words, incorrect article 'a' before two adjectives describing home, and missing comma before 'so'. Also replace redundant 'at home' (already stated) with 'there'. Suggestion: remove repetitions, do not use 'a' before uncountable state adjectives when describing a place (use 'is comfortable and quiet'), and add comma before coordinating conjunctions linking clauses.

× So I can concentrate.

✓ So I can concentrate on my studies.

This short sentence is vague; clarifying the object 'on my studies' completes the idea and connects to previous context. Suggestion: provide the object to make the sentence informative.

× I have a dedicated desks, dedicated desk.

✓ I have a dedicated desk.

Incorrect article and number agreement: 'a' should be followed by a singular noun; 'desks' is plural so mismatch. Also repeated phrase. Suggestion: choose singular or plural consistently and avoid repetition.

× I would like to study immediate massage in Australia uh because I want to improve my pro practical skills umm After completing the course, I uh, I plan to gain experience by working.

✓ I would like to study immediate massage in Australia because I want to improve my practical skills. After completing the course, I plan to gain work experience.

Problems: 'pro practical' is redundant/incorrect; likely intended 'practical'. Missing punctuation between clauses; repetition 'I uh, I'. 'Gain experience by working' is acceptable but 'gain work experience' is more natural. Suggestion: remove filler words, correct duplicated or misspoken words, and use concise phrasing.