Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 文法と語順の誤りを修正し、回答を簡潔にまとめてください。また「set year」のような曖昧な表現は避け、学年を明確に述べてください。トピック文→補足（専攻内容や学んでいること）という構成を守り、語彙は文脈に合った単語を使うと自然になります。具体的には、不要なフレーズを削り、動詞の時制・前置詞を正しく使いましょう。

Exemplo: I'm a second-year university student majoring in foreign languages. I study subjects like multilingualism and phonetics, which help me understand how different languages work and how sounds are produced.

Sugestão: 語順と前置詞の誤りを直し、意味の曖昧な語（例：anti vandalism、body languages）を正確な語に置き換えてください。また、ひとつの文で主語→場所→補足の順に話すと自然です。関連する具体例（学んでいる科目の目的）を簡潔に述べると良いでしょう。

Exemplo: I study at a university in Osaka. My courses include phonetics and multilingualism, which improve my understanding of linguistics and how people communicate.

Sugestão: 回答を簡潔にし、余分なフレーズを減らしてください。通学時間や周辺環境について話すときは数字や具体的な表現（例えば“30 minutes by train to the city center”）を使い、接続語（because, also）で理由をつなげると論理的になります。スラング的表現（chilling）は避け、より正式な語を使いましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to study. It is only about 30 minutes by train to the city center, and the campus is surrounded by green spaces, which makes it a calm and pleasant environment for studying.

Sugestão: 言いたいことは伝わりますが、語彙と文法を正確にしましょう。理由を述べるときは具体的に（例えば清掃頻度、設備の古さ）説明し、接続詞（for example, because）でつなげると説得力が増します。'clear'は不適切なので 'clean' や 'modern' を使いましょう。

Exemplo: I would like the university to renovate the bathrooms. They often look old and not very clean, so improving the facilities and increasing cleaning frequency would make them much more hygienic.

Sugestão: 構成は良いですが、冗長な語（'about', 'umm'）や重複（'I I'm'）を避けて簡潔に述べましょう。『考えている国』や『専攻分野』を明確にし、理由も一文で添えると説得力が出ます。将来の意図は短く明瞭に表現してください。

Exemplo: I'm considering doing a master's degree abroad, possibly in Iran or the UK. I plan to continue studying linguistics because I want to specialize in phonetics and multilingual education.

× 'I'm a set year university student majoring in foreign language at.'

✓ 'I'm a seven-year university student majoring in foreign languages.'

'a set year' is ungrammatical and should be a numeral adjective like 'seven-year'; 'foreign language' needs plural 'languages' when referring to studies in multiple languages; the preposition at at the end is unnecessary. Use 'a seven-year university student' or better 'a university student in my seventh year'; ensure number words are correct and place count-modifiers before nouns.'

× 'My course focuses on following languages and for example I learn about multilingualism and phonetics.'

✓ 'My course focuses on the following languages; for example, I study multilingualism and phonetics.'

'following languages' requires the definite article 'the'; 'learn about' is acceptable but 'study' is more natural in this academic context; the sentence needs punctuation to separate clauses and 'for example' should be followed by a comma.'

× 'So I study for the languages in my university which is in Osaka.'

✓ 'I study languages at my university, which is in Osaka.'

'study for the languages' is awkward: use 'study languages'; use preposition 'at' for institutions; non-restrictive clause 'which is in Osaka' should be set off by a comma.'

× 'My courses focus on anti vandalism, phonetics so I can enhance the understanding towards linguistics and body languages.'

✓ 'My courses focus on antisocial behavior prevention and phonetics so I can improve my understanding of linguistics and body language.'

'anti vandalism' is not a standard course title; a clearer phrase is 'antisocial behavior prevention' or specify the course; 'the understanding towards' should be 'my understanding of'; 'body languages' is incorrect—use uncountable 'body language'.'

× 'I think it is a good place to study so you can go to the center heart of Osaka, such as meditation by train for like 30 minutes.'

✓ 'I think it is a good place to study because you can get to the heart of Osaka by train in about 30 minutes.'

'so you can go to the center heart of Osaka' is unidiomatic; use 'get to the heart of Osaka'; 'such as meditation' is incorrect here—likely 'by train'; 'for like 30 minutes' should be 'in about 30 minutes' for duration/time to travel.'

× 'And around my university there's so many greenery places which you can feel relaxed and chilling.'

✓ 'And around my university there are so many green spaces where you can relax and hang out.'

'there's' is singular contraction; use plural 'there are' for 'many green spaces' (singular/plural agreement).'greenery places' is awkward; use 'green spaces'; 'feel relaxed and chilling' should be 'relax and hang out' for natural phrasing.'

× 'I can come up with some ideas about my university.'

✓ 'I can come up with some ideas for my university.'

'about my university' is not wrong but 'ideas for my university' is more natural when suggesting changes; this is minor but aligns better with collocation.'

× 'So the main change I want to is the design of bathroom.'

✓ 'So the main change I want is the design of the bathrooms.'

'want to is ungrammatical here; use 'want' followed by a noun clause; 'the design of bathroom' needs article and plural: 'the bathrooms' or 'the bathroom design'.'

× 'So bathroom in the university look umm not clean, not hygienic.'

✓ 'The bathrooms in the university look, um, unclean and unhygienic.'

'bathroom' should be plural 'bathrooms' to match 'look'; add definite article 'the'; 'not clean, not hygienic' can be more naturally expressed as 'unclean and unhygienic'.'

× 'So I want them to be renovated to be more clear.'

✓ 'So I want them to be renovated to be cleaner.'

'more clear' is used for clarity, not cleanliness; use 'cleaner' to describe improved hygiene; 'renovated' is fine but pair with appropriate adjective.'

× 'My future study plans are still not clear but I I'm considering about doing masters degree outside of Japan such as in Iran or the UK.'

✓ 'My future study plans are still not clear, but I'm considering doing a master's degree outside of Japan, for example in Iran or the UK.'

Remove duplicate 'I'; 'considering about' is incorrect—use 'considering doing'; 'masters degree' needs possessive/apostrophe and article: 'a master's degree'; add commas for clarity.'

× 'Umm I want to keep doing my linguistic journey in master course.'

✓ 'I want to continue my linguistic studies in a master's program.'

'keep doing my linguistic journey' is informal and unclear; 'linguistic studies' or 'linguistics' is better; 'master course' should be 'master's program' or 'master's course'; use 'continue' instead of 'keep doing' for formality.'