Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "I am a ninth-grade student") and avoid contradictions or unnecessary phrases like "I'm gonna be a student in the near future." Provide one or two specific details about your study focus and keep it under 3–4 sentences. Use correct grammar for school names and subjects (e.g., "I study at No. 82 Secondary School and my main subject is history, taught in English").

Exemplo: I am a ninth-grade student at No. 82 Secondary School. My main subject is history, which I study in English, and I enjoy learning about different historical periods.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and tighten sentences. Begin with a direct statement, then add one clear reason using a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid repeating similar adjectives (quiet/peaceful) and unnecessary adverbs (productively and efficiently together).

Exemplo: I usually study at school, but I prefer the public library because it is quiet and helps me concentrate, so I can finish my homework more quickly.

Sugestão: Make the response more fluent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with one specific reason and a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Correct verb forms and avoid repetition of the word "because."

Exemplo: Yes, I think the library is a good place to study because it is quiet and free from the distractions I experience at school, so I can focus better on my work.

Sugestão: Be specific about the changes you want and avoid filler phrases. Start with a clear statement about whether you'd like changes, then give one or two concrete improvements and a brief reason. Use correct grammar (e.g., "it lacks some books" not "just lacks").

Exemplo: Yes, I would like some changes. For example, the library could add more books in my age group and update the history section because I often cannot find suitable or recent materials for my studies.

Sugestão: Organize and clarify your plans. Begin with a clear topic sentence about uncertainty or intention, then list one or two concrete, realistic goals with timelines. Avoid vague phrases like "fourth certificate" without explanation and use simpler, correct future forms ("I plan to" or "I hope to").

Exemplo: I am not completely sure yet, but I plan to finish my current certificate this year and then apply to university next year to study history, aiming to earn a bachelor's degree.

× Currently I am a 9th grader and I study at the 82nd school in our town and I'm gonna be a student in the near future and my major subjects are history in English.

✓ Currently I am a 9th grader and I study at the 82nd school in our town. I'm going to continue as a student in the near future, and my main subjects are history and English.

Errors: missing or incorrect articles and awkward phrasing ('the 82nd school' should likely be 'the 82nd School' or 'School No. 82'; 'gonna' is informal and inappropriate; 'major subjects are history in English' is unclear). Suggestion: Use 'the' with a specific school name, replace 'gonna' with 'going to', separate into two sentences for clarity, and list subjects with 'and' or 'and English' to show two subjects. (grammar_problem_type_id:22)

× Most of the time I study uh at this school, but I also like to uh, study in the library because library is very quiet and peaceful for me to do my homework productively and efficiently, umm, which really helped me focus and concentrate on my studies.

✓ Most of the time I study at this school, but I also like to study in the library because the library is very quiet and peaceful for me to do my homework productively and efficiently, which really helps me focus and concentrate on my studies.

Errors: missing definite article before 'library' and tense/agreement mismatch ('helped' should be 'helps' to match present habitual context). Suggestion: Add 'the' before 'library' and keep verbs in present simple when describing habitual actions. (grammar_problem_type_id:27)

× I think it's pretty good place to study because libraries as I mentioned, are really quiet because in this school there's a lot of people around me and I it's will be really distracting for me.

✓ I think it's a pretty good place to study because, as I mentioned, libraries are really quiet, whereas at this school there are a lot of people around me and it can be really distracting for me.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'pretty good place'; awkward word order and redundancy; incorrect contraction 'I it's will be' and wrong tense/modal construction. Suggestion: Use 'a' before singular noun, reorder phrases for clarity, and use 'can be' to express potential distraction. (grammar_problem_type_id:6)

× So I mostly chose libraries to study.

✓ So I mostly choose libraries to study.

Error: incorrect past tense 'chose' for a habitual present action. Suggestion: Use present simple 'choose' for habitual behavior. (grammar_problem_type_id:5)

× Yeah, I think it would be really good if it will, if there will be any changes in the library, because I think in the library where I study, uh, just lacks some books because sometimes when I visit there, I umm, find it hard to find suitable books for me.

✓ Yeah, I think it would be really good if there were some changes in the library, because the library where I study lacks some books; sometimes when I visit, I find it hard to find suitable books for me.

Errors: incorrect future conditional 'if it will, if there will be'—English uses past subjunctive 'if there were' for hypothetical situations; missing article before 'library' and unnecessary words. Suggestion: Use 'if there were' for polite hypothetical suggestions, remove filler words, and use 'the library' to refer to a specific place. (grammar_problem_type_id:7)

× Umm, I don't exactly know my study plans, but I think I'll get my uh, fourth certificate until this year and also I will get into a university and will get my degrees or qualifications.

✓ I don't exactly know my study plans, but I think I'll get my fourth certificate this year, and I will also get into a university and obtain my degrees or qualifications.

Errors: awkward use of 'until this year' (should be 'this year'); repetitious modal forms 'will get' and inconsistent verbs. Suggestion: Use 'this year' for deadlines, place 'also' appropriately, and use varied verbs like 'obtain' for formality and clarity. (grammar_problem_type_id:6)