Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use correct grammar and clear vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your status, then give one or two specific details (university name, major, focus). Avoid filler words and pronunciation errors. Use linking words if needed.

Exemplo: I'm a third-year student at Funfair University in Vietnam. I study Human-Centered Engineering, which focuses on designing and creating new products that improve people's daily lives.

Sugestão: Use correct verb forms and organize details logically. Give location first, then explain the planned move with a linking word (because/so). Keep it to two or three sentences maximum and be precise about timing and reasons.

Exemplo: I study at Fumbra University in District 7, Ho Chi Minh City. However, next year the university plans to move to District 9 because the official campus there is still under construction.

Sugestão: Avoid contradictory or unclear words ("worse"). Start with a clear opinion (positive or negative), then support it with two specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (liberal arts, psychology, applied psychology) and correct tense and phrasing.

Exemplo: Yes, I think it's a good place to study because it uses a liberal arts approach that exposes me to subjects like physics and applied psychology. This broad education helps me think creatively when designing and innovating products.

Sugestão: Be direct and formal when discussing serious issues. Start with a topic sentence stating the change you want, then give a brief reason and, if possible, a suggestion for improvement. Use correct tense and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: I would recommend the university improve its sexual harassment policy because I have experienced problems that were not handled well. For example, they should provide clearer reporting procedures and regular awareness training for students and staff.

Sugestão: State your plan clearly and give specific destinations and reasons. Use correct verb forms and linking words to explain why you choose those places. Keep it concise and give one or two supporting details about how the internships relate to your goals.

Exemplo: In the future, I plan to apply for international internships in East Asia, such as China, Taiwan, or Hong Kong, because these locations have strong design industries and are culturally and geographically close to Vietnam. An internship there would help me gain practical experience and regional insights relevant to my field.

× I'm study in Fumbra University, Vietnam.

✓ I'm studying at Fumbra University in Vietnam.

The student used 'I'm study' which is incorrect. The continuous present requires 'am' + present participle ('studying'). Also use preposition 'at' for institutions and include 'in' before country. Suggestion: use 'I'm studying at [University] in [Country]'.

× My school located in this District 7, Ho Chi Minh City and maybe in the next year is we'll move to the District 9 because this the district 9 is the official office of my university and is still building now.

✓ My school is located in District 7, Ho Chi Minh City, and maybe next year we will move to District 9 because District 9 is the official campus of my university and it is still under construction.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after the subject and has awkward word order ('is we'll move'). Use 'is located' for place, 'next year we will move' for future, and 'under construction' for buildings being built. Suggestion: split into clearer clauses and use correct verb forms.

× Yeah, I think it's the it's very worse because it's it's it's educate me in the liberal art method and I can learn a lot of things nostrils about physics or not about electrical.

✓ Yeah, I think it's very bad because it educates me using a liberal arts approach and I can learn many things, not only about physics but also about electrical topics.

'Very worse' is incorrect; use 'much worse' or 'very bad'. Repetition and wrong forms ('educate me' should be 'educates me') and 'nostrils' is likely a mispronunciation of 'not only' or 'not just'. 'Liberal arts' is the correct term. Suggestion: use 'educates' for third-person singular and 'not only... but also' to contrast subjects.

× It's it's helped me study about the word psychology and applied psychology in create and innovate.

✓ It has helped me study psychology and applied psychology in creating and innovating.

Use present perfect 'has helped' for past actions relevant now. Do not use 'study about the word psychology' — 'study psychology' is correct. Use gerunds 'creating' and 'innovating' after preposition 'in'. Suggestion: use 'has helped me study [subject] in creating and innovating'.

× If I have some things to like advise or like to recommend my school to change some things, I would like to recommend the policy of the sexual harassment and I'm used to like I used to experience it.

✓ If I could advise my school on changes, I would recommend improving the sexual harassment policy because I have experienced it.

Awkward modal and conditional phrasing. Use 'If I could advise' or 'If I had suggestions' and 'I would recommend'. 'I'm used to like I used to experience it' is redundant; 'I have experienced it' is clear. Suggestion: use clear conditional structure and simple perfect tense to report past experience.

× And I think this this problem my school is not solved is good enough.

✓ And I think this problem at my school has not been solved well enough.

Incorrect word order and tense. Use present perfect passive 'has not been solved' to show ongoing relevance, and 'well enough' instead of 'is good enough' in this context. Suggestion: use 'has not been solved well enough' for unresolved issues.

× In the future, my plan is find some international internship opportunities to go abroad and I am into China, Taiwan or just like Hong Kong, something is Asian and it's really like a relative relate to Vietnam.

✓ In the future, my plan is to find some international internship opportunities abroad, such as in China, Taiwan, or Hong Kong, because they are in Asia and are closely connected to Vietnam.

Missing 'to' after 'is' ('plan is to find'). 'I am into China' is incorrect; use 'in' or 'such as'. 'Something is Asian' is wrong; clarify 'because they are in Asia'. 'Relative relate to Vietnam' is incorrect — use 'closely connected to Vietnam'. Suggestion: use 'plan is to' + verb, and list examples with 'such as' or 'for example'.

× I'm currently a third year university student and I'm studying at Funfair University Vietnam and I've studied in the Human Center Engineer Ringfield, which is a focus on create or like innovate new products for the people.

✓ I'm currently a third-year university student studying at Funfair University in Vietnam, and I have studied in the Human Center for Engineering Ringfield, which focuses on creating and innovating new products for people.

Use hyphen in 'third-year' and article/preposition 'in Vietnam'. 'I've studied in the Human Center Engineer Ringfield' needed 'for' and corrected noun order 'Center for Engineering'. 'Which is a focus on create' is incorrect; use 'which focuses on creating and innovating'. Suggestion: use correct noun phrases and gerunds after 'focus on'.

× this the district 9 is the official office of my university and is still building now.

✓ District 9 is the official campus of my university and is still under construction.

Use 'is' correctly and 'under construction' for buildings being built. 'Official office' is better as 'official campus'. Avoid 'is still building' which incorrectly uses active voice. Suggestion: use passive 'is still under construction'.

× Where do you study? Student: I'm study in Fumbra University, Vietnam.

✓ Where do you study? Student: I'm studying at Fumbra University in Vietnam.

Use 'at' for institutions and 'in' for countries. Also correct present continuous 'I'm studying'. Suggestion: 'I'm studying at [University] in [Country]'.