Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 전체적으로 답변의 의도는 명확하지만 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예: 'with County University' 대신 'at County University', 'trade and business' 대신 'trade and business'의 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요. 또한 간결한 주제문 뒤에 이유를 연결할 때 접속사와 구체적 예시를 더 사용하면 좋습니다. 문장은 최대 5문장 이내로 유지하고 반복을 피하세요.

Exemplo: I'm a student at County University, where I study trade and business. I chose this major because I'm interested in international marketing, which combines my interest in global markets and consumer behaviour. For example, I enjoy analyzing how brands adapt their strategies across countries, and I hope to work in international marketing after graduation.

Sugestão: 좋은 시작이지만 문법 오류와 문장 불완전성이 있습니다. 'at evening'은 'in the evenings'가 자연스럽고 끝 문장이 끊겨 있어 완성된 정보를 제공하지 못합니다. 장소 이유를 말할 때 구체적 세부사항(예: 좌석, 리소스, 분위기)을 추가하고, 문장을 2–3문장으로 정리하세요.

Exemplo: I usually study in my school's library because it's quiet and comfortable. I go there in the evenings after my classes to use the study desks and online databases. The quiet atmosphere helps me concentrate better for long study sessions.

Sugestão: 핵심 아이디어는 있지만 표현이 어색하고 불필요한 단어('insurance') 사용과 문장 단편화가 있습니다. 'well equipped'는 'well-equipped'로 하이픈 필요, 예약 제도의 장단점과 구체적 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 논리적 흐름을 위해 접속사를 활용하고 문장을 마무리하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a very good place to study because it's peaceful and well-equipped with computers and quiet study rooms. Students must make a reservation to enter, which reduces noise and ensures everyone has a seat. As a result, there are fewer distractions and I can focus better.

Sugestão: 주장 자체는 명확하지만 문법 오류(중복 'from', 'in $2.00 that' 의미 불명확)와 불완전한 제안 설명이 문제입니다. 구체적인 해결책(예: 예약 취소 규정, 시간 제한, 페널티)을 제시하고 이유와 기대 결과를 덧붙여 논리적으로 설명하세요.

Exemplo: Yes. The reservation system is inconvenient because some students reserve seats and then don't show up, blocking others. I would introduce a penalty for no-shows, such as cancelling the reservation after 15 minutes or charging a small fee, so seats become available for students who need them.

Sugestão: 의도는 보이지만 문장이 단편적이고 어휘 사용이 부정확합니다('starting commerce and trade'와 'Worlds fluctuations' 등). 미래 계획을 명확한 시제로 표현하고, 왜 비즈니스 행정을 공부하고 싶은지 구체적인 이유와 목표를 덧붙이세요. 문장은 2–3문장으로 구성하세요.

Exemplo: At the moment I'm studying commerce and trade, and next year I'd like to study business administration to deepen my management skills. I'm interested in how global economic fluctuations affect companies, so gaining a broader understanding of finance and strategy will help me pursue a career in international business.

× I'm a student with County University.

✓ I'm a student at County University.

Use 'at' with institutions and no extra article before the university name; 'with' is incorrect here. Use 'at' to indicate affiliation with a university. Suggestion: say 'I'm a student at County University.'

× My major is trade and business.

✓ My major is trade and business (international trade and business).

The phrase is awkward; specify the field using correct noun phrases. If meaning is 'international trade and business', include 'international' before the fields. Suggestion: 'My major is international trade and business.'

× I choose my major because I'm interested in international marketing so I would like to work in my field.

✓ I chose my major because I'm interested in international marketing, so I would like to work in this field.

Mix of present and past choice: use past tense 'chose' to indicate decision made. Also use 'this field' instead of 'my field' for clarity and add a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: 'I chose my major because I'm interested in international marketing, so I would like to work in this field.'

× I usually study in my school's library because it is quiet and comfortable.

✓ I usually study in my school's library because it is quiet and comfortable.

Original sentence is acceptable; 'in' with 'library' and possessive 'my school's' is correct. No change needed.

× I go there at evening after my classes with my.

✓ I go there in the evening after my classes.

Use the prepositional phrase 'in the evening' not 'at evening'. The phrase 'with my' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestion: 'I go there in the evening after my classes.'

× Yes, the library provides a peaceful and well equipped environment for studying and students need to make a reservation to enter the library, which helps reduce noise and insurance.

✓ Yes, the library provides a peaceful and well-equipped environment for studying, and students need to make a reservation to enter the library, which helps reduce noise and ensure safety.

Hyphenate 'well-equipped'. The clause 'which helps reduce noise and insurance' is incorrect: likely intended 'ensure' or 'increase' safety; use 'ensure safety' or 'maintain order'. Suggestion: replace 'insurance' with 'ensure safety' or 'maintain order'.

× Everyone has a seat, for example. The limited entry means there are fewer distractions. So.

✓ For example, everyone has a seat. The limited entry means there are fewer distractions.

Fragment 'So.' is incomplete and should be removed or attached. Move 'for example' to the beginning of the sentence; combine sentences for clarity. Suggestion: 'For example, everyone has a seat, so there are fewer distractions.'

× Yes, the reservation system is inconvenient because some people reserve the seat and don't use them, which prevents other students from from studying.

✓ Yes, the reservation system is inconvenient because some people reserve seats and don't use them, which prevents other students from studying.

Correct plural 'seats' and remove duplicated 'from'. 'Reserve the seat' should be plural or unspecified 'seats'. Suggestion: '...because some people reserve seats and don't use them, which prevents other students from studying.'

× I would change the current rule in $2.00 that.

✓ I would change the current rule to a $2.00 fee for no-shows.

Original is unclear and ungrammatical. Use 'to a $2.00 fee' to express the intended change; add 'no-shows' or 'not using reserved seats' to clarify. Suggestion: 'I would change the current rule to a $2.00 fee for no-shows.'

× I'm currently starting commerce and trade.

✓ I'm currently studying commerce and trade.

Use 'studying' rather than 'starting' to describe ongoing academic engagement. 'Starting' implies beginning; if you mean enrolled, say 'studying'. Suggestion: 'I'm currently studying commerce and trade.'

× I would like to study business administration next year because I'm interested in. Worlds fluctuations.

✓ I would like to study business administration next year because I'm interested in world fluctuations.

Split sentence is incorrect: 'interested in.' should be followed by the object. Combine into one sentence and correct 'Worlds' to 'world' and use singular 'fluctuations' as the noun phrase. Suggestion: '...because I'm interested in world fluctuations.'