Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Break your response into clearer sentences, state directly that you are a student, and briefly describe the classes with precise wording. Avoid repetition and grammar errors (e.g., subject-verb agreement, word order). Use one or two linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I'm a student. My high school offers several English classes, like Current Issues and Academic Writing. For example, Current Issues covers important news topics, while Academic Writing teaches how to structure essays and use formal language.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence naming the school, then add specific supporting details about the commute and your feelings. Use linking words (however, because, so) to connect clauses and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'longer than my friends' commute'). Keep it concise.

Exemplo: I study at a local coastal high school. It takes me about an hour to get there, which is longer than my friends’ commute, so I often find it hard to wake up early. However, I think the long trip is worth it because I really enjoy my classes and the school atmosphere.

Sugestão: Start with a direct answer and give two specific reasons. Fix grammar (articles, verb forms) and avoid repeating words. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' to make the explanation coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, it's a good place to study because there are few distractions around the campus, which helps me concentrate. Also, we can see a beautiful ocean from my classroom, and that view reduces my stress after long lessons.

Sugestão: Clarify the exact change you want (more extracurricular options, better facilities, etc.) and explain why with a specific reason. Use correct vocabulary ('more varied extracurricular activities' not 'square') and connect ideas with 'so' or 'because'. Keep it within two or three sentences.

Exemplo: I would like the school to offer more varied extracurricular activities, such as sports clubs and study groups, so students can relax and improve focus. I think these options would help me balance study and free time, leading to better concentration in class.

Sugestão: This answer is clear and well-structured. To improve further, add one specific detail about why Malaysia appeals to you (e.g., language, university strength) or one concrete step you're taking now. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'so' to tie reasons together.

Exemplo: I plan to study international relations at a university in Malaysia because the country has strong regional programs and English-medium courses. I am interested in global policy since I want to work for the United Nations, and I believe studying there will give me the knowledge and contacts to pursue that career.

× I'm a student my high school offer various English classes such as current issues and academic writing.

✓ I'm a student. My high school offers various English classes such as Current Issues and Academic Writing.

The original contains two independent clauses joined without punctuation and has subject-verb agreement error: 'high school' (singular) needs verb 'offers' (adds -s). Also course names are capitalized. Fix by separating into two sentences and using correct verb form. Suggestion: Use a period between independent clauses and ensure verbs agree with singular subjects.

× For example, current issues may be available of important current issues and academic writing may teach me how to structure.

✓ For example, Current Issues may cover important current affairs, and Academic Writing may teach me how to structure essays.

Phrase 'available of' is incorrect preposition and collocation; 'cover' is appropriate verb. Repetition 'current issues' is redundant; 'current affairs' is clearer. Also 'how to structure' needs an object (e.g., 'essays'). Suggestion: choose correct verbs and include necessary objects.

× I study at high school.

✓ I study at a high school.

When referring to attending a high school in general, English requires an article before 'high school'. Use 'a' for a nonspecific singular noun. Suggestion: include 'a' or 'the' depending on specificity.

× It takes about one hour to get there from my home, which is usually longer than my friends, so it's really challenging to wake up early.

✓ It takes about one hour to get there from my home, which is usually longer than it takes my friends, so it's really challenging to wake up early.

The phrase 'longer than my friends' is incomplete; comparison needs an object or clause ('longer than it takes my friends'). Add the omitted verb phrase to make the comparison clear. Suggestion: include the compared action or use 'longer for me than for my friends.'

× But I think it's worth doing it and I'm really enjoying it.

✓ But I think it's worth it, and I really enjoy it.

Mixed tense and unnecessary extra 'doing' make sentence awkward. 'Worth it' is the correct idiom; 'I really enjoy it' is simple present expressing a general liking. Suggestion: use consistent present tense and common idioms.

× Yes it's good place to study because there is no distraction surrounding at my school which help me concentrate and we can see beautiful ocean from my classroom classroom which reduce my stress after long lessons.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to study because there are no distractions surrounding my school, which help me concentrate, and we can see the beautiful ocean from my classroom, which reduces my stress after long lessons.

Multiple errors: missing articles ('a' before 'good place'; 'the' before 'beautiful ocean'), plural agreement ('distractions' plural), wrong preposition 'surrounding at' should be 'surrounding' or 'around', subject-verb agreement ('which help' should agree with 'distractions' but relative clause intended to refer to 'no distractions'—keep 'which helps' if referring to the peaceful environment—here corrected to 'which help me' matching 'distractions'), repeated word 'classroom classroom' removed, and verb agreement 'which reduces' refers to 'the ocean view' and needs singular verb. Suggestion: check articles, plural forms, prepositions and ensure relative clauses refer to correct antecedents.

× I want square extracurricular activities to do other places which is which help to concentrate on my study.

✓ I want more extracurricular activities and other places to study, which would help me concentrate on my studies.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear: 'square extracurricular activities' is incorrect word choice; verb and noun order wrong; 'which is which help' is redundant and incorrect. Recast to express desire for more activities and spaces; 'studies' plural is natural. Suggestion: use clearer nouns ('more extracurricular activities', 'other places to study') and correct relative clause 'which would help me...'.

× I hope this will lead to greater focus on my study.

✓ I hope this will lead to greater focus on my studies.

'My study' is awkward; use plural 'my studies' to refer to overall academic work. Suggestion: prefer 'my studies' or 'my studying' depending on context.

× I plan to go to university in Malaysia and study international relations.

✓ I plan to go to university in Malaysia and study International Relations.

This sentence is mostly correct; capitalization of the academic program is optional but common. If referring to a specific university, 'the university' could be used; as a general intent, 'go to university' is acceptable. Suggestion: capitalize the course name as a proper noun.

× I am interested in global policy because I want to work for the United Nations.

✓ I am interested in global policy because I want to work for the United Nations.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestion: keep present tense for current interests and future intentions.

× I believe this will give me the knowledge and contacts to pursue my career.

✓ I believe this will give me the knowledge and contacts to pursue my career.

This sentence is correct as written. It appropriately uses 'will' to indicate future outcome. Suggestion: none needed.