Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 句子总体能回答问题但有不自然和重复之处。应直接说“I’m a university student majoring in Financial Management.” 避免多余词（如“in a university”与“I’m a student”重复），注意冠词和大小写，保持一句话为主题句，最多补充1-2句具体信息即可。练习连贯表达并控制在5句内。

Exemplo: I’m a university student majoring in Financial Management. I chose this field because I’m interested in how companies manage their funds, and I hope to work in corporate finance after graduation.

Sugestão: 表意清楚但语法和流利度欠佳。避免口头填充词（uh, umm），不要用“or”连接地名和描述，应用定语从句或短语自然衔接，例如“Yantai, a beautiful coastal city in China.” 可适当补充一句说明原因或感受。

Exemplo: I study in Yantai, a beautiful coastal city in China. I enjoy living there because the scenery is lovely and the climate is mild.

Sugestão: 回答有正面观点但表达混乱和有语法错误。去掉口语填充，使用明确原因并用连接词（because, since）。注意教师的表达应为“teachers at Yantai are highly qualified”或“the teachers are of high quality”。避免重复词（to to）。

Exemplo: Yes, it’s a great place to study because the campus environment is peaceful and the teachers are highly qualified, so I can learn a lot from them.

Sugestão: 回答含糊且有语法问题与重复（think...think、good chance good change）。应直接说明希望改进的具体方面（e.g. facilities, libraries, labs）并给出原因，使用连接词列举改进点。保持句子简洁和条理清晰。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like some improvements, especially to the facilities. For example, upgrading the library resources and renovating the study rooms would create a better learning environment for students.

Sugestão: 回答信息不明确且句子结构有误（“study in the university for seven years to maintain myself”不清晰）。应明确说明计划（e.g. finish bachelor’s and maybe pursue a master’s), 用具体时间和目的说明原因，避免模糊的动词搭配。

Exemplo: I plan to finish my bachelor's degree and then continue with a master's program, so I expect to spend about six to seven years studying in total. After that, I hope to find a job in finance to start my career.

× I study in Yantai or beautiful uh, coastal city in China, umm.

✓ I study in Yantai, a beautiful coastal city in China.

原句中使用了“or”不正确，且表述不连贯。应使用逗号或非限定性同位语（a ... city）来补充说明地点。建议使用“a beautiful coastal city”作为同位语连接，句子更自然流畅。

× Yes, it is a good place to study because uh, the environment is great and the teacher from Yante is very high quality to to touch us.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study because the environment is great and the teachers from Yantai are very qualified to teach us.

原句存在多处问题：1）地名拼写应为“Yantai”，2）“the teacher”与后文含义不符，应为复数“teachers”，3）“very high quality to to touch us”用词错误且重复，正确表达为“very qualified to teach us”。因此需要改为复数并更换动词短语。

× Yes, I think it's better to make some changes because I think good chance good change like improve the facilities is good for our study.

✓ Yes, I think it's better to make some changes because improvements, such as upgrading the facilities, would be good for our studies.

原句中“good chance good change like improve the facilities”结构混乱，量词与名词搭配不当。应使用名词“improvements”并用短语“such as upgrading the facilities”来举例；同时“study”应改为复数“studies”指学习活动。句子需要重构以明确意思。

× I think I will study in the university for seven years to maintain myself and find a job to earn money.

✓ I think I will study at university for seven years to support myself and then find a job to earn money.

原句中介词应为“at university”更常用；“maintain myself”表达不自然，应使用“support myself”；此外建议加连接词“then”使时间顺序更清楚。