Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Make the answer more concise and correct grammatical errors. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your status, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and remove redundancy.

Exemplo: I have just graduated and will start a master’s at UCL next month. The Business and Sustainability program emphasizes practical projects, so I hope to work with companies and apply the skills I gained during my undergraduate degree.

Sugestão: Lead with a direct statement answering the question, then give specific details about your university and subjects. Avoid saying unrelated status like ‘not working’ unless it adds value. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I studied at Koç University in Istanbul, where I completed my undergraduate degree. I specialized in International Relations and also did a minor in Business Administration, which gave me a good mix of politics and practical business knowledge.

Sugestão: Provide a clear opinion followed by one or two specific reasons in full sentences. Combine short fragments and use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I think it is an excellent place to study because it is consistently highly ranked in Turkey, which attracts top professors. As a result, the university offers strong research opportunities and high-quality teaching.

Sugestão: Good structure—clear opinion and specific issue. Improve by tightening language and adding a brief example of how changes would help. Use linking words like “therefore” or “for example.”

Exemplo: Yes. The university has too few quiet study spaces for the student population, so it is often difficult to concentrate. For example, adding more small group rooms and silent study zones would therefore allow students to work on projects without interruptions.

Sugestão: Strong, direct answer with specific details. To improve further, link your plans to concrete goals and mention one specific skill or project type you hope to undertake.

Exemplo: I will start a master’s in Business and Sustainability at UCL in a few months. I plan to work on practical consultancy-style projects that will strengthen my sustainability strategy skills and improve my project management experience, especially in corporate supply chains.

× I recently graduated from university last week and I accepted an offer from UCL.

✓ I graduated from university last week and accepted an offer from UCL.

The sentence uses 'recently' and 'last week' together which is redundant; both indicate past time. Also 'recently graduated' with 'last week' is acceptable but combining 'I recently graduated from university last week and I accepted...' is wordy. Use simple past 'graduated' and 'accepted' for completed actions in the past. Suggest using one past time marker and use parallel verb forms: 'I graduated ... and accepted ...'.

× I hopefully starting a masters in Business and Sustainability next month.

✓ I will hopefully start a master's in Business and Sustainability next month.

The original lacks the correct auxiliary verb and uses incorrect gerund form 'starting'. For future intention, use 'will' plus base verb 'start' or 'am starting'. Also 'masters' needs possessive apostrophe as 'master's' when referring to the degree. Suggest: 'I will hopefully start a master's ...' or 'I am starting a master's ... next month.'

× I'm really excited because the program focus on practical projects which companies which should help me apply what I learned during my undergraduate studies.

✓ I'm really excited because the program focuses on practical projects with companies, which should help me apply what I learned during my undergraduate studies.

Subject-verb agreement: 'program' (singular) requires 'focuses' (third person singular). Also the sentence has word order and relative clause issues: 'projects which companies which' is incorrect; change to 'projects with companies, which'. Maintain past tense 'learned' for completed undergraduate studies.

× If you look at University Rankings.

✓ If you look at university rankings, you will see this.

The original is a sentence fragment without a main clause. 'If' introduces a conditional subordinate clause and must be followed by a main clause. Also 'University Rankings' should be lowercase unless a proper noun. Provide a complete sentence such as 'If you look at university rankings, you will see this.' or combine with the next sentence.

× Mine is consistently ranked among the top universities in Turkey, and that reputation attracts excellent professors and strong research opportunities.

✓ My university is consistently ranked among the top universities in Turkey, and that reputation attracts excellent professors and strong research opportunities.

Using 'Mine' as a pronoun in this context is informal and ambiguous. Replace with 'My university' for clarity and correct noun reference. Also 'Mine' as a possessive pronoun doesn't fit the formal register here.

× Our university currently has insufficient study spaces for the number of students, so it is often hard to find a quiet place and concentrate.

✓ Our university currently has an insufficient number of study spaces for the number of students, so it is often hard to find a quiet place to concentrate.

Phrase 'insufficient study spaces for the number of students' is understandable but awkward. Better to say 'an insufficient number of study spaces' or 'not enough study spaces'. Also 'find a quiet place and concentrate' is improved to 'find a quiet place to concentrate' to use the infinitive purpose structure.

× I think adding more study areas or small groups rooms would help students study more effectively.

✓ I think adding more study areas or small group rooms would help students study more effectively.

'small groups rooms' is ungrammatical; use 'small group rooms' (singular 'group' as modifier). Also consider 'study rooms for small groups' as an alternative. No article needed before the plural nouns in this context.

× I am currently not working. I'm waiting to start my postgraduate studies later this year.

✓ I am currently not working; I'm waiting to start my postgraduate studies later this year.

The original sentences are grammatically acceptable, but a semicolon improves flow. 'Waiting to start' is correct use of infinitive after 'waiting'. No tense change required. Suggest keeping as is or combine for smoother speech.

× I completed my undergraduate degree in Coach University in Istanbul, where I specialized in International Relations with a minor in Business Administration.

✓ I completed my undergraduate degree at Koç University in Istanbul, where I specialized in International Relations with a minor in Business Administration.

Use 'at' for institutions: 'completed ... at Koç University'. Also the university name likely is 'Koç University' (proper noun spelling). Past tense 'completed' and 'specialized' are correct for finished studies.

× Definitely it's the best place to study in my country.

✓ Definitely, it's the best place to study in my country.

Grammatically the sentence is acceptable; adding a comma after 'Definitely' improves readability. No article error though; included for completeness.

× If you look at University Rankings. Mine is consistently ranked among the top universities in Turkey, and that reputation attracts excellent professors and strong research opportunities.

✓ If you look at university rankings, my university is consistently ranked among the top universities in Turkey, and that reputation attracts excellent professors and strong research opportunities.

Combine the conditional fragment with the main clause to form a complete sentence. Use 'my university' for clarity and lowercase 'university rankings'. This fixes sentence fragment and reference issues.

× I recently accepted an offer from UCL in London, so in the next few months I will start a program called Business and Sustainability.

✓ I recently accepted an offer from UCL in London, so in the next few months I will start a program called Business and Sustainability.

The original sentence is grammatically correct; no singular/plural error. Included here to confirm correctness. Ensure consistency with 'a program' and 'Business and Sustainability' as a program title.