Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: حاول أن تكون إجابتك أكثر تنظيماً وطبيعية: ابدأ بجملة موضوع واضحة (هل تعمل أم تدرس)، ثم أضف تفاصيل قصيرة ومحددة دون تكرار أو تردد. تجنب التعبيرات الصوتية مثل "uh" و"umm" واستخدم كلمات محددة (مثلاً: "I work as a computer lab manager at a private school and I am also studying for a bachelor's degree at university").

Exemplo: I work as a computer lab manager at a private school, and I am also studying for a bachelor's degree at Soha University. This lets me gain practical experience while continuing my education.

Sugestão: أجب بجملة موضوع واضحة تحدد اسم الجامعة والتخصص ثم أعطِ تفاصيل محددة ومترابطة باستخدام أدوات الربط. صف ما تتعلمه بدقة بدل العبارات الغامضة. قلل الترددات الصوتية وكرر الأفكار مرة واحدة فقط.

Exemplo: I study at Soha University, majoring in computer science. I focus on app design and management, learning how to create user-friendly applications and integrate different features effectively.

Sugestão: قدم رأياً واضحاً ثم اذكر أسباب محددة مترابطة باستخدام روابط مثل "because" أو "because of". تجنب الأخطاء النحوية البسيطة وكلمات غير صحيحة مثل "near to money". استخدم مفردات مناسبة لوصف المكان.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a great place to study because it is close to many services such as shops, restaurants and a shopping mall. Also, the campus has a large library which makes studying convenient.

Sugestão: ابدأ بجملة واضحة تحدد ما ترغب في تغييره ثم اشرح السبب واقترح حلاً محدداً باستخدام روابط منطقية. قلل التلعثم واستخدم تراكيب صحيحة (مثلاً: "The government should install traffic lights and pedestrian crossings").

Exemplo: Yes, I would like some changes because the area is very crowded. The local government should install traffic lights and better pedestrian crossings to improve traffic flow and safety.

Sugestão: قدم خطة مستقبلية واضحة: اذكر الدرجة التي تريدها والتخصص ثم سبب الاختيار مع أمثلة محددة لكيفية استخدام هذا التخصص. تأكد من صحة الكلمات (مثلاً: "pursue a master's degree") وقلل الحشو والتكرار.

Exemplo: I plan to pursue a master's degree in artificial intelligence because I want to develop AI solutions that help people and improve business processes. For example, I hope to work on intelligent systems that optimise healthcare scheduling and educational platforms.

× Originally I'm working in a private school.

✓ Originally I work at a private school.

The student used present continuous 'I'm working' to describe a regular job; English prefers simple present for habitual actions. Also 'in a private school' is acceptable but 'at a private school' is more natural for place of employment. Suggestion: use simple present for permanent jobs and 'at' for workplace.

× It's uh, for the computer, uh, since umm, to just uh, management umm, but uh, still.

✓ It's for computer management.

The original has incorrect and redundant prepositions and filler words. Use 'for' to indicate purpose and a concise noun phrase 'computer management'. Suggestion: remove fillers and unnecessary prepositions to make the phrase clear.

× I am a student in uh university to complete my uh, bachelor degree.

✓ I am a university student completing my bachelor's degree.

Use 'a university student' (more natural) and 'completing' as present participle to show ongoing action. Use possessive form 'bachelor's degree'. Suggestion: use 'bachelor's degree' and a continuous or present simple structure for ongoing studies.

× I study on Soha University.

✓ I study at Soha University.

Use 'at' with institutions (study at a university), not 'on'. Suggestion: replace 'on' with 'at'.

× My major is, uh, related to the computer science, uh, how to manage the, uh, apps and how to design it, uh, in, uh, by use it, uh, simple way, uh, just to, to make sure that some apps in together to get the, umm, perfect, perfect.

✓ My major is computer science. It focuses on app management and design, teaching how to design and use apps in simple ways so they work well together.

The original mixes many incorrect prepositions and awkward phrases. 'Related to the computer science' should be 'is computer science' or 'related to computer science'. Use clear clauses: 'focuses on', 'teaching how to', and 'so they work well together'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use 'focus on' for subjects, and use clear verb phrases like 'design and use apps'.

× Yeah, it is very, uh, perfect places to study because it is, uh, near to money, umm, service there, uh, to you can found a lot of market restaurants and uh, mall, uh, also it's a topic, uh, inside a big library there, so it is very nice.

✓ Yes, it is a very good place to study because it is near many services. You can find many markets, restaurants and a mall, and there is a large library, so it is very nice.

Original has plural/singular mismatches ('places' vs 'it is'), incorrect prepositions ('near to money, service'), and wrong verbs ('found' instead of 'find'). Use 'a place' for singular and 'many' for plural nouns. Suggestion: match singular/plural, use 'near many services', and use present tense 'find'.

× I think I want to some, uh, changes there because it is the crowded places.

✓ I think I want some changes there because it is crowded.

The phrase 'I want to some changes' is ungrammatical; use 'I want some changes' or 'I want to make some changes'. 'The crowded places' is incorrect in this context; use 'it is crowded' to describe the area. Suggestion: use 'want to make some changes' or 'want some changes' and avoid unnecessary articles.

× So it should government. Government should to be, uh, to be, umm, just use it, uh, traffic light, uh, for the people and, uh, and car, uh, to manage their traffic there and, and reduce that.

✓ The government should install traffic lights for pedestrians and cars to manage traffic and reduce congestion.

Original misorders words and misuses pronouns/articles ('it should government'). Use 'the government' as subject and a clear verb 'should install'. 'To be' is unnecessary. 'Reduce that' is vague; use 'reduce congestion'. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb order and specific nouns like 'traffic lights' and 'congestion'.

× I want to brochure masters degree in artificial intelligence to use it in beneficial things to do for the human and and many places for example to accompany how to improve their plans to use it in the best way.

✓ I want to pursue a master's degree in artificial intelligence to use it in beneficial ways for people and organizations, for example to help them improve their plans and use AI effectively.

The phrase 'want to brochure masters degree' is incorrect; use 'want to pursue a master's degree'. 'Beneficial things to do for the human and and many places' is unclear; use 'beneficial ways for people and organizations'. Suggestion: use 'pursue a master's degree' and concise phrases like 'help them improve their plans' and 'use AI effectively'.