Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng ngay câu đầu; tránh thông tin không liên quan và lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên dùng 2–3 câu ngắn, nêu rõ bạn là học sinh trung học, bạn làm gì để phát triển (ví dụ: học thêm, tham gia hoạt động thực hành). Chú ý dùng từ đúng (ví dụ: "broadening my knowledge" thay vì tên người), và tránh câu quá dài lặp ý.

Exemplo: I'm a high school student. I spend most of my time attending lessons and extra classes to improve my knowledge and practical skills. I also take part in extracurricular activities to gain more experience.

Sugestão: Cần câu chủ đề rõ ràng và số liệu hợp lý; nói rõ tên trường (nếu có) và khoảng thời gian đi lại bằng cách dùng một con số hợp lý. Tránh câu lộn xộn, từ không phù hợp và cấu trúc sai. Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý một cách mạch lạc.

Exemplo: I study at Cola High School, which is close to my home. It usually takes me about 10 to 15 minutes to get there, so the commute is short. I enjoy studying there because lessons are interesting and the teachers are supportive.

Sugestão: Cần đưa ra câu chủ đề trực tiếp, giải thích rõ lý do bằng chi tiết cụ thể và đúng ngữ pháp. Tránh cấu trúc chưa hoàn chỉnh và lỗi từ (ví dụ: "Chinese exam" có thể là "college entrance exam"), dùng liên từ để giải thích vì sao trường tốt (giáo viên, tài nguyên, kết quả học sinh).

Exemplo: Yes, I think it's a good place to study. Many graduates from my school perform well in the college entrance exams, which shows the teaching quality is high. The school also provides good resources and supportive teachers.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng: câu hỏi hỏi về thay đổi mà bạn muốn trường thực hiện, nhưng bạn nói về thay đổi bản thân. Cần trả lời đúng trọng tâm: nêu một hoặc hai thay đổi cụ thể bạn muốn ở trường (ví dụ: cập nhật thiết bị, thêm câu lạc bộ), giải thích lý do và dùng ngữ pháp chính xác (ví dụ: "step out of" chứ không phải "stepped out").

Exemplo: I'd like the school to improve the library and provide more modern equipment. This would help students study more effectively and develop practical skills outside lessons.

Sugestão: Cần trả lời trực tiếp: nêu rõ mục tiêu học tập và lý do chọn trường/ngành. Tránh dùng tiếng lóng như "wanna"; dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng và ngắn gọn (2–3 câu). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về ngành học hoặc mục tiêu nghề nghiệp để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

Exemplo: I plan to study at the Foreign Trade University to major in international business. I chose this university because it has strong programs and good links with companies, which will give me better career opportunities.

× To be honest, now I'm just a high school student who is also in the process of broadening Harry Jones and gaining practical skills.

✓ To be honest, I'm currently a high school student who is also in the process of broadening my knowledge and gaining practical skills.

The sentence uses incorrect noun 'Harry Jones' which seems unintended and 'now' and 'currently' redundancy; tense is present continuous which is fine but 'broadening' needs an object like 'my knowledge'. Use 'I'm currently' for natural present continuous expression. Suggestion: Replace unintended proper noun with the intended noun 'my knowledge' and remove redundant time words.

× In addition, nowadays I spend most of my time going to school and extra classes to widen my knowledge so as to achieve higher and better results in the future and in my long term.

✓ In addition, nowadays I spend most of my time attending school and extra classes to broaden my knowledge and achieve better results in the future and in the long term.

Use of 'going to school and extra classes' is awkward; 'attending' fits present habitual action. 'Widen' is less natural than 'broaden'. 'Higher and better results' is redundant; 'better results' suffices. 'In my long term' is incorrect; use 'in the long term'. Suggestion: Use 'attending' for regular actions and concise phrases like 'better results' and 'in the long term'.

× Honestly now I'm studying in Cola high school which is quite near from my house.

✓ Honestly, I'm now studying at Cola High School, which is quite near my house.

Use preposition 'at' with 'study' for institutions. 'Near from' is incorrect; use 'near' or 'near to' but 'near my house' is natural. Capitalize the proper noun 'High School'. Suggestion: Use 'at' for institutions and drop 'from' after 'near'.

× In addition, I only spend roughly 10 or sometimes 50 minutes going to my school and studying all the day and they find this gone so interesting and engaging for me.

✓ In addition, I only spend roughly 10 to 50 minutes traveling to school and study there all day, which I find very interesting and engaging.

Tense and structure: 'going to my school and studying all the day' is awkward; use 'traveling to school and study there all day'. '10 or sometimes 50 minutes' should be '10 to 50 minutes'. 'They find this gone so interesting' is incorrect pronoun/phrase; replace with 'I find it very interesting'. Suggestion: Clarify subject and use natural collocations like 'traveling to school' and 'find it interesting'.

× So capital like my.

✓ So I like it very much.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended meaning is expressing personal liking. Rephrase to 'I like it very much' for clarity. Suggestion: Use simple complete sentence with subject and verb.

× Of course, I consider my high school now as a good place to study for three years.

✓ Of course, I consider my high school a good place to study; I have been studying there for three years.

'Consider ... now as' is awkward; 'consider ... a good place' is correct. The time expression 'for three years' should attach to a verb (have been studying) to indicate duration. Suggestion: Use present perfect continuous to express duration and clean word order.

× Is evident to see that there are many pupils from my high school who achieve better results in their university in Chinese exam.

✓ It is evident that many graduates from my high school achieve better results in Chinese university exams.

Missing subject 'It is evident'. 'Pupils from my high school who achieve better results in their university in Chinese exam' is awkward; use 'graduates' or 'students' and 'Chinese university exams'. Ensure subject-verb agreement with present simple 'achieve'. Suggestion: Add dummy subject 'It is' and use plural nouns correctly.

× It also entered in one of the best universities now.

✓ Many of them are also admitted to some of the best universities now.

Original passive/structure is incorrect: 'It also entered in one of the best universities' lacks clear subject. Use 'Many of them are admitted to some of the best universities' to express that graduates enter top universities. Suggestion: Use passive 'are admitted' with clear subject 'many of them'.

× As far as I'm concerned, I quite love the place where I can study to make many changes for myself.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, I quite like the place where I can study and make many changes for myself.

Use 'like' instead of 'love' to fit tone; 'study to make many changes' uses incorrect infinitive; combine actions with 'and make' or use gerund properly. 'Quite love' is less natural than 'quite like'. Suggestion: Use coordinated verbs and natural collocations.

× Saying that, when I change myself, it's also a time when I can enhance my skill and broaden my horizons.

✓ That said, when I change myself, it's also a time when I can enhance my skills and broaden my horizons.

'Saying that' is better as 'That said'. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' to match general meaning. Tense is okay. Suggestion: Use idiomatic transition 'That said' and pluralize 'skills'.

× In addition, it's also the time when I can stepped out of my comfort zone and achieve.

✓ In addition, it's also the time when I can step out of my comfort zone and achieve my goals.

'Stepped' is past tense or past participle; after 'can' use base form 'step'. 'Achieve' needs an object like 'my goals' to be complete. Suggestion: Use modal + base verb (can step) and provide an object for 'achieve'.

× Honestly, now I have a clear goal and plan to do in the future.

✓ Honestly, I now have a clear goal and a plan for the future.

'Plan to do in the future' is awkward; use 'a plan for the future'. Present simple 'have' is correct for current possession. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases like 'a plan for the future'.

× In the future, I choose wanna study in foreign trade university, which is a good place to study.

✓ In the future, I plan to study at the Foreign Trade University, which I believe is a good place to study.

'Choose wanna' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'plan to' or 'want to'. Use preposition 'at' for institutions and capitalize proper noun. 'Foreign Trade University' is treated as a name. Suggestion: Use 'plan to study at' or 'want to study at' and formal wording.

× In addition, I think that when studying in this university, I can also have more opportunities to succeed.

✓ In addition, I think that by studying at this university, I will have more opportunities to succeed.

Use 'by studying at' to indicate means. 'Can also have' is acceptable but 'will have' is stronger for future expectation. Use 'at' with university. Suggestion: Use clear future expression 'will have' and correct preposition 'at'.