Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 発音と文法の誤り（例えば "I measure in" や冗長な表現）を直し、主題文を明確にしてから1〜2の具体的な理由を付け加えてください。また文は5文以内に抑え、結びで目的を簡潔に述べるようにしてください。接続語（because, and, so）を正しく使い、動詞の時制と形を一致させましょう。

Exemplo: I'm a university student majoring in economics. I am also studying English because I plan to study economics in the UK. Studying English will help me communicate with professors and classmates there.

Sugestão: 意味を明確にするために正しい動詞（study, major）を使い、大学名や特徴を簡潔に述べてください。『run』や語順の誤りを避け、理由や詳しい説明を付ける時は接続語（because, so, which）でつなぎましょう。具体性（学部や教授の専門分野）を加えると良いです。

Exemplo: I study economics at Mid University, which is one of the most well-known universities in Japan. I hope to work with a leading economics professor there because their research matches my interests.

Sugestão: 主張を支持する具体例を明確に述べ、不要な比喩や不正確な表現（"run faster", "booster accidental"）を避けてください。文法（複数形・所有格）と語彙（"students", "improves my skills", "career prospects"）を正しく使い、接続語で論理をつなぎましょう。

Exemplo: Yes, it's an excellent place to study because I can discuss ideas with motivated, high-achieving students. These discussions improve my analytical skills and enhance my career prospects. The supportive environment also encourages me to work harder.

Sugestão: 問題点を具体的に述べ（例：トイレの故障、清潔さの欠如）、改善案（頻繁な清掃、修理や設備の更新）を1〜2文で提案すると説得力が増します。語彙は正確に（"flushes" や "facilities"）使い、理由は短く明確に示してください。

Exemplo: Yes, I would like the university to repair and maintain the restrooms because many flushes and doors are broken. Improving cleanliness and fixing facilities would make them safer and more convenient for students, especially during busy hours.

Sugestão: とても良い内容ですが、不自然な語句（"readinng researchers"）を正し、もう少し具体的にどの分野を学びたいかやどのように英語力を高めるかを示すと良いです。接続詞で理由をつなぎ、文は簡潔にまとめてください。

Exemplo: I plan to study economics in the UK to improve my English and gain a deeper understanding of global markets. Many top universities there have renowned economists and strong programs, so I hope to study international finance and learn research methods from leading academics while gaining international experience.

× I'm a university student, I measure in in economics and I also studying English because I plan to study abroad in the UK and study economics and talk with.

✓ I'm a university student. I major in economics and I am also studying English because I plan to study abroad in the UK to study economics and to be able to speak with others.

The original sentence has multiple sentence-structure problems: run-on sentences and missing auxiliary verbs. 'measure in in economics' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'major in'. 'I also studying' lacks the auxiliary 'am' and should be 'I am also studying'. The clause 'and study economics and talk with' is unclear and incomplete; clarify intent as 'to study economics and to be able to speak with others'. Suggest breaking long run-on sentences into shorter sentences and ensuring necessary auxiliary verbs are present.

× I'm running economics in the at the mid university which is one of the famous university in in Japan. Also I want to run with the famous professor of economics.

✓ I am studying economics at Mid University, which is one of the most well-known universities in Japan. I also want to work with a well-known professor of economics.

The phrase 'I'm running economics' incorrectly uses 'running' instead of 'studying' (present continuous wrong verb). 'in the at the mid university' has extra prepositions; use 'at Mid University'. 'one of the famous university in in Japan' has singular/plural and duplicate preposition errors; use 'one of the most well-known universities in Japan'. 'want to run with the famous professor' is incorrect verb/preposition use; 'work with' is appropriate. Recommendations: use 'study' for academic programs, correct prepositions ('at'), and ensure singular/plural agreement for 'university/universities'.

× Yes, it's an excellent place to study because I can discuss ideas with motivated high achieving student which helps me run faster.

✓ Yes, it's an excellent place to study because I can discuss ideas with motivated, high-achieving students, which helps me progress faster.

'high achieving student' lacks a hyphen and correct plural form; use 'high-achieving students'. Missing comma before 'which' for non-restrictive clause. 'helps me run faster' is semantically odd; 'progress faster' or 'improve faster' fits better. Advice: hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns, match plural forms, and choose verbs that convey intended meaning.

× Also studying their improves my skills and boosts my future career purpose.

✓ Also, studying there improves my skills and boosts my future career prospects.

'their' is incorrect pronoun for place; use 'there'. 'future career purpose' is unnatural; 'future career prospects' or 'career goals' is appropriate. Also missing comma after 'Also'. Suggest choosing correct place adverbs and common collocations like 'career prospects'.

× So I learn about booster accidental.

✓ So I learn about boosting my opportunities by chance.

The original sentence 'I learn about booster accidental' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended meaning is that studying boosts opportunities, or accidental learning; corrected to 'I learn about boosting my opportunities by chance' though clarifying the intended idea with the student would be better. Suggest forming clear subject-verb-object phrases and using correct nouns ('boosting' as gerund) and adjectives ('accidental' is rarely used this way).

× Yes, I would like the university to repair the restrooms because many things and flashes are broken.

✓ Yes, I would like the university to repair the restrooms because many fixtures and flushes are broken.

'many things and flashes' is vague and contains incorrect words. 'Fixtures' (sinks, toilets) and 'flushes' (toilet flush mechanisms) are appropriate. Also 'the university' is acceptable here because referring to a specific institution; no article change needed. Advice: use precise vocabulary for objects and verify word choice ('flushes' not 'flashes').

× It makes them unhealthy and inconvenient for students, especially during the visit hours.

✓ This makes them unhygienic and inconvenient for students, especially during visiting hours.

'Unhealthy' usually describes people or states; for places use 'unhygienic' or 'unsanitary'. 'the visit hours' is incorrect collocation; use 'visiting hours' or 'busy hours'. Replace 'It makes them' with 'This makes them' for clarity. Recommendation: choose collocations commonly used for facilities and hours.

× I'm planning to study economics in the UK to improve my English and gain a deeper understanding of global markets.

✓ I'm planning to study economics in the UK to improve my English and to gain a deeper understanding of global markets.

Original sentence is mostly correct but parallelism is improved by adding 'to' before 'gain' for balanced infinitive phrases: 'to improve... and to gain...'. Suggest maintaining parallel structure in coordinated infinitives.

× Many top universities there have renowned economists and strong programs, so I hope to learn from reading researchers and gain the international experience.

✓ Many top universities there have renowned economists and strong programs, so I hope to learn from leading researchers and gain international experience.

'reading researchers' is a mistranslation; intended 'leading researchers'. 'gain the international experience' should be 'gain international experience' without 'the'. Advice: use correct collocations ('leading researchers', 'international experience') and avoid unnecessary articles.