Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự câu để trả lời rõ ràng hơn; tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ phù hợp. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 lý do cụ thể. Chú ý phát âm và dùng thì nhất quán (hiện tại tiếp diễn/hiện tại đơn).

Exemplo: Yes, I am working part-time while studying at university. I chose to work because I want to earn money and learn how to manage my finances. Additionally, the job gives me practical experience related to my courses, which helps reinforce what I learn in class.

Sugestão: Sắp xếp câu theo cấu trúc rõ ràng, sử dụng thì đúng và từ vựng phù hợp; tránh từ không rõ nghĩa. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu tên trường, rồi mô tả 1–2 đặc điểm cụ thể với liên từ để mạch lạc.

Exemplo: I study at the University of Love, which has very modern facilities. For example, the library and computer labs are well-equipped, and the bright, pleasant campus makes students feel comfortable.

Sugestão: Trả lời trực tiếp rồi nêu 2 lý do rõ ràng; tránh lặp từ và dùng ngữ pháp chính xác (ví dụ: 'has modern facilities', 'I would recommend it to others'). Dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'for example' để làm rõ mối liên hệ.

Exemplo: Yes, I would definitely recommend it to others because it has modern facilities such as a large library and well-equipped computer labs. These resources help students study more effectively and enjoy their time on campus.

Sugestão: Nêu rõ thay đổi mong muốn với các chi tiết cụ thể và dùng cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh. Tránh tiếng ừ ờ; dùng từ chính xác (e.g., 'faster Wi-Fi', 'up-to-date software') và giải thích ngắn lý do vì sao.

Exemplo: Yes, I would like the university to upgrade the computer labs, especially by providing faster Wi-Fi and up-to-date software. This would allow me to work on complex assignments more efficiently and access online resources without interruptions.

Sugestão: Trình bày kế hoạch rõ ràng theo trình tự thời gian và dùng từ đúng (ví dụ: 'after I graduate', 'learn a particular skill', 'since childhood'). Nêu mục tiêu cụ thể và cách bạn sẽ thực hiện nó, tránh câu dài và lủng củng.

Exemplo: After I graduate, I plan to move to Saigon to train as a bartender, a skill I have loved since childhood. I will practice daily, attend professional courses, and aim to become a well-known bartender in the future.

× Yeah, I'm currently working while studying at university.

✓ Yeah, I'm currently working while studying at university.

No change needed; sentence correctly uses present continuous for current ongoing actions.

× I choose actual work.

✓ I chose actual work.

The student used present tense 'choose' but the context refers to a past decision; use simple past 'chose'. Cần dùng thì quá khứ đơn để diễn tả quyết định đã xảy ra trong quá khứ.

× I chose to work because I want to earn money and learn how to save for my future.

✓ I chose to work because I wanted to earn money and learn how to save for my future.

Maintain consistent past perspective after 'I chose'; subordinate verbs should be in past ('wanted') to match time frame. Nên giữ một mạch thời gian; dùng 'wanted' để phù hợp với 'chose'.

× And if you can also have me again, have fun experience relevant to my study.

✓ And I can also gain useful experience relevant to my studies.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Recast to subject 'I' with verb 'gain' and pluralize 'studies'. Sửa lại cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng: chủ ngữ + động từ + tân ngữ và danh từ số nhiều khi nói về lĩnh vực học.

× I'm study at where University of love and it had a modern facility like Layla pre and computer lab and the campus very very bright and special and did it a reason why I very enjoy this play because it's have students feel very comfortable.

✓ I study at the University of Love, which has modern facilities like labs and a computer lab; the campus is very bright and special, and that is the reason why I really enjoy being here because it makes students feel very comfortable.

Multiple errors: use simple present 'I study' for current attendance; use article 'the' with university name; 'has' (simple present) for facilities; correct noun forms 'facilities' and 'computer lab'; fix clause linking ('which has...'); 'is' for campus; use 'really enjoy being here' and 'makes students feel' for clarity. Nhiều lỗi thời gian, mạo từ, số nhiều và cấu trúc câu; cần chia lại câu cho rõ ràng.

× Is it a good place to study?

✓ Is it a good place to study?

No correction needed; question correctly uses articles.

× Yeah, I would highly recommend display for another for another people because it's had a modern facilities as library and computer lab and the big campus which is so special.

✓ Yeah, I would highly recommend this place to other people because it has modern facilities such as a library and a computer lab, and a large, unique campus.

Rewrite required: 'recommend this place to other people' is correct phrasing; use present 'has' not 'had'; 'facilities' is plural; 'such as' for examples; adjective order 'large, unique campus'. Sửa cấu trúc câu, mạo từ và số nhiều.

× So that is it the reason why student can learn better and they can enjoy their time learning.

✓ So that is the reason why students can learn better and enjoy their time learning.

Use 'students' plural and remove unnecessary 'it' and repeated 'they can' for conciseness; present simple is correct for general statements. Sửa số nhiều và cấu trúc câu để mạch lạc.

× I would like my school to improve the campus facility, especially UMM computer lab because modern computer lab will uh with faster Wi-Fi and uh, modern software can help me learn better and complex complete assignment faster.

✓ I would like my school to improve the campus facilities, especially the computer lab, because a modern computer lab with faster Wi-Fi and modern software can help me learn better and complete assignments faster.

Use plural 'facilities'; add article 'the' for 'computer lab'; 'a modern computer lab with' is correct structure; use 'complete assignments' (plural) and remove filler 'uh'. Cần sửa mạo từ, số nhiều, và sắp xếp từ để diễn đạt ý rõ ràng.

× After I graduate my university, I will move to Saigon city to learn a Paris task skill which is my favorite job when I was childhood.

✓ After I graduate from university, I will move to Saigon City to learn a pastry-making skill, which has been my favorite since childhood.

Use 'graduate from university'; capitalize 'Saigon City'; likely intended 'pastry' not 'Paris'; use 'pastry-making skill' and reword 'has been my favorite since childhood' for correct tense and meaning. Sửa giới từ, viết hoa, từ vựng sai và thì cho phù hợp.

× So I will leave and try to improve this skill everyday and I also want to become a famous bartender.

✓ So I will stay and try to improve this skill every day, and I also want to become a famous bartender.

Context suggests 'stay' rather than 'leave' after moving; 'every day' is two words; maintain future 'will' for intent. Nếu ý là ở lại nơi mới để học thì dùng 'stay'; sửa 'every day' và cấu trúc câu.