Study— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clear and direct. Start with a simple topic sentence (e.g., “I’m currently a student”), then briefly state recent achievement and next plan. Use correct tense and precise vocabulary (e.g., “completed my intermediate in Computer Science” and clarify what you mean by “budget in central and above” — perhaps “study abroad” or “apply to universities in the city center and overseas”). Keep it to 1–3 sentences and avoid extra words.

Exemplo: I’m currently a student. I recently completed my intermediate studies in Computer Science, and I’m planning to apply to universities in the city center and abroad to continue my education.

Sugestão: Answer directly with the college name and location, use correct grammar and short sentences. Avoid unclear phrases (“His name is the Lord”, “doing expectation”). If you don’t want to name it, say “a local college in my city.” Mention current status and future intention clearly.

Exemplo: I studied at a local college in my city, where I completed my intermediate in Computer Science. I now plan to pursue further studies abroad to gain more experience.

Sugestão: Give a direct evaluation then support with specific reasons. Use accurate collocations (e.g., “good place to study”, “students who are interested in Computer Science and Biology”, “known for high pass rates”). Keep sentences concise and link reasons with words like “because” or “because of”.

Exemplo: Yes, it is a good place to study because it has strong Computer Science and Biology programs. Many students achieve high exam results and the college has experienced teachers and good lab facilities.

Sugestão: Say one or two specific changes and explain why. Use correct nouns (e.g., “projectors”, “smart boards”, “sports facilities”) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (“for example”, “so that”) to show purpose.

Exemplo: Yes. For example, I would like the college to replace old projectors and whiteboards with modern smart boards so lessons can be more interactive. I would also improve sports facilities so students can exercise and relax after classes.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear topic sentence about your main plan, then give concise reasons and specific details (where and why). Correct tense and phrasing: “I recently completed my intermediate studies” and “I plan to do my bachelor’s degree in Computer Science in Australia because…” Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I recently completed my intermediate studies in Computer Science, and I plan to pursue a bachelor’s degree in the same field. I want to study in Australia because of its high-quality universities and opportunities for practical experience in technology.

× I'm a student, recently I complete my intermediate in computer science and now I'm planning to do my budget in central and above.

✓ I'm a student. Recently I completed my intermediate in computer science, and now I'm planning to study at a university in the central area or above.

The original uses present simple 'complete' for a recent finished action; past simple 'completed' is correct. Also the sentence structure is awkward; split into two sentences and replace unclear phrase 'do my budget in central and above' with a plausible meaning 'study at a university in the central area or above'. Use commas and conjunctions to connect clauses correctly.

× I completely my intermediate from the local college and it is located in the my city.

✓ I completed my intermediate at the local college, and it is located in my city.

The verb 'completely' is an adverb used incorrectly; the past tense verb 'completed' is required. Use preposition 'at' for institutions and remove the extra article 'the' before 'my city'.

× His name is the Lord and now I am doing expectation and well I'm planning to do my best here in abroad.

✓ Its name is The Lord, and now I am expecting good results. Well, I'm planning to do my best abroad.

The college is an institution and should take the pronoun 'its' not 'his'. 'Doing expectation' is incorrect phrase; use 'expecting' or 'expecting good results'. 'In abroad' is ungrammatical; use 'abroad' without 'in'. Also separate ideas into clearer clauses.

× Yes absolutely is a very nice place to study and the it's a very best for those child have had a likeness onto steady computer science and their biology.

✓ Yes, absolutely. It is a very nice place to study, and it's very good for children who are interested in computer science and biology.

Original lacks proper subject-verb order ('is' before subject). 'The it's' is redundant. 'A very best' is incorrect; use 'very good' or 'the best'. 'Those child have had a likeness onto steady' is ungrammatical—use 'children who are interested in'. Correct subject-verb agreement and simplify wording.

× It is famous for its result and majority of new students get the good result from this institute.

✓ It is famous for its results, and the majority of new students get good results from this institute.

'Result' should be plural 'results' when speaking generally. 'Majority' requires 'the majority' and 'good result' should be plural 'good results'. Remove unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'good'.

× Yes, I would like to take some changes such as I want to make more advanced in the facilities.

✓ Yes, I would like some changes, such as making the facilities more advanced.

'Take some changes' is not idiomatic; 'would like some changes' or 'make some changes' is correct. 'Make more advanced in the facilities' has wrong word order and pronoun use; rephrase to 'making the facilities more advanced'.

× I like the there's a old screening app and the board I want to replace with the new screens and the bores and that creates more facilities, sports facilities, especially with my college.

✓ For example, there is an old screening app and old boards that I want to replace with new screens and boards to create better facilities, especially sports facilities, at my college.

Use 'an old' not 'a old'. Remove misleading 'the' before 'there's'. 'Bores' is incorrect; likely 'boards'. 'That creates more facilities' is vague—rephrase to 'to create better facilities'. Use 'at my college' not 'with my college'.

× Well recently I complete my intermediate in computer science and my future plan is to complete my bachelor degree in the same field because I have a great interest in studying computer science with the childhood.

✓ Well, recently I completed my intermediate in computer science, and my future plan is to complete my bachelor's degree in the same field because I have had a strong interest in computer science since childhood.

Use past tense 'completed' for a finished action. 'Bachelor degree' requires possessive form 'bachelor's degree'. 'With the childhood' is incorrect; use 'since childhood'. 'Have a great interest' is improved to 'have had a strong interest' to show long-term interest.

× So my principal plan is I want to complete my degree in abroad in Australia.

✓ So my main plan is to complete my degree abroad in Australia.

Use 'main' instead of 'principal' in this context. 'I want to' is unnecessary when stating a plan; infinitive 'to complete' is more natural. 'In abroad' is incorrect; use 'abroad'. Place country after 'abroad' or say 'in Australia' as needed.