Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 「Yes」と直接答えられていますが、回答が途中で途切れ、「My. My mother.」という不完全な表現になっています。母親がどのような活動を勧めてくれたのかを、具体的な例と理由を含めて2〜3文で説明しましょう。また、文を言い直す場合は、落ち着いて一度だけ言い直し、内容を最後まで完成させてください。

Exemplo: Yes, I had several opportunities to try new activities as a child. My mother encouraged me to take piano lessons and join a swimming club. I enjoyed swimming because it helped me make new friends.

Sugestão: 意見は明確ですが、「because」の後に文を切らず、「because they can...」と続ける必要があります。また、「improve their many kinds of skills」は不自然なので、「develop a wide range of skills」や「discover their strengths」を使うと自然です。さらに、異なる活動を試すメリットを具体例で補足すると、内容と流れがより充実します。

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try a wide range of activities because they can develop different skills. They may also discover talents or interests they did not know they had. For example, trying a new sport can improve both their fitness and teamwork skills.

× My. My mother.

✓ My mother gave me opportunities to try new activities when I was a child.

「My. My mother.」は動詞がなく、完全な文になっていません。また、途中で言い直した結果、意味が未完成になっています。主語の後に動詞と必要な情報を加えて、完全な文にしましょう。

× I think people should try as many different things because. They can improve their many kinds of skills.

✓ I think people should try as many different things as they can because they can develop many different skills.

because は理由を示す従属接続詞なので、その直後で文を区切ることはできません。because とその理由を同じ文の中で続ける必要があります。また、develop many different skills のほうが、さまざまな技能を身につけるという意味を自然に表します。