Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question more directly and avoid repeating “favorite activity” and “favorite hobby.” Use the past tense consistently: say “whenever we found a new recipe” instead of “whenever we find.” Also, replace the unnatural phrase “I and my mother” with “my mother and I,” and organize the answer into a clear main idea followed by one specific supporting detail.

Exemplo: Yes, I had the opportunity to learn cooking from my mother when I was a child. Whenever we found a new recipe, we tried making it together, which was both enjoyable and educational. For example, we often baked cakes or prepared simple pasta dishes at the weekend. As a result, cooking became one of my favorite hobbies.

Sugestão: Your opinion is clear, but the answer is one long sentence with repeated ideas such as “different options” and “what options you have.” Use linking words and divide the response into two or three shorter sentences. Add a specific example or result to make the supporting idea more convincing, and use the natural phrase “broaden their perspectives.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and broaden their perspectives. For instance, someone who tries volunteering, sports, and creative hobbies may realize that they are especially good at working with others. It is better to explore these possibilities than to remain focused on just one option.

× So I used to love cooking and whenever we find a new recipe I and my mother we both used to try them together so it became my favourite activity and also one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ So I used to love cooking, and whenever we found a new recipe, my mother and I would try it together. Therefore, it became my favourite activity and one of my favourite hobbies.

The answer describes childhood experiences in the past, so find should be changed to found. The past form would is also natural for a repeated past action after whenever. Use found when referring to a past event.

× So I used to love cooking and whenever we find a new recipe I and my mother we both used to try them together so it became my favourite activity and also one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ So I used to love cooking, and whenever we found a new recipe, my mother and I would try it together. Therefore, it became my favourite activity and one of my favourite hobbies.

My mother and I is the correct subject order; I should come after the other person. The pronoun we is unnecessary because my mother and I already functions as the subject. Also, it must be used instead of them because it refers to the singular noun recipe. Place the other person first in a compound subject and make sure pronouns agree in number with the nouns they replace.

× Definitely people should try as many things as they can so that they can explore different options they have and maybe get a broader perspective like it is always better to see what options you have instead of just sticking to one.

✓ Definitely, people should try as many things as they can so that they can explore the different options available to them and perhaps gain a broader perspective, because it is always better to see what options they have instead of sticking to just one.

Like is not the appropriate conjunction for introducing the explanation in this sentence. Because clearly expresses the reason. Use because or as when you want to explain why something is true.

× Definitely people should try as many things as they can so that they can explore different options they have and maybe get a broader perspective like it is always better to see what options you have instead of just sticking to one.

✓ Definitely, people should try as many things as they can so that they can explore the different options available to them and perhaps gain a broader perspective. It is always better to see what options they have instead of sticking to just one.

The original sentence is too long and joins several complete ideas without clear punctuation. Divide it into two sentences to make the structure clearer. Use commas after introductory words such as Definitely and separate closely related ideas with a full stop when necessary.