Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and support your idea with a specific example. Use the plural form “parents,” say “join events, clubs, and sports,” and replace the unnatural phrase “from there” with “through these activities.” Also, “knowledge” is quite general, so mention a particular skill or activity you learned.

Exemplo: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities because my parents encouraged me to join different clubs and sports teams. For example, I took swimming lessons and joined a school drama club. Through these activities, I developed better communication skills and became more confident.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion and then explain one or two benefits with a specific example. Use “participate in as many activities as possible,” not “participate as many things.” Correct “participate sports” to “take part in sports” or “participate in sports,” and avoid the repetition and grammatical error in “they are more they're fitter.”

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them develop different skills and gain valuable experiences. For instance, playing a team sport can improve both physical fitness and cooperation. These skills may also help people work more effectively with others in the future.

× I had plenty of opportunities as a child because my parent encouraged me to join many events, clubs, sports.

✓ I had plenty of opportunities as a child because my parents encouraged me to join many events, clubs, and sports.

The plural noun parents is more appropriate when referring generally to both a mother and a father. Also, and should be used before the final item in a list of three or more items.

× I had plenty of opportunities as a child because my parent encouraged me to join many events, clubs, sports.

✓ I had plenty of opportunities as a child because my parents encouraged me to join many events, clubs, and sports.

When listing three or more items, use and before the final item. The structure events, clubs, and sports is the standard form of a coordinated list.

× To be honest, I think people should participate as many things as they can because it will provide them with new soft skills and many new experiences that will benefit them in the future.

✓ To be honest, I think people should participate in as many activities as they can because this will provide them with new soft skills and many new experiences that will benefit them in the future.

The verb participate is followed by the preposition in when referring to an activity. Therefore, say participate in activities, not participate activities. Activities is also more natural than things in this context.

× For example, when people participate sports, they are more they're fitter and healthier.

✓ For example, when people participate in sports, they become fitter and healthier.

Participate must be followed by in before the activity. The correct expression is participate in sports.

× For example, when people participate sports, they are more they're fitter and healthier.

✓ For example, when people participate in sports, they become fitter and healthier.

Fitter is already the comparative form of fit, so it cannot be used with more. Use either more fit or fitter, but not more fitter. Fitter and healthier correctly compare people's condition before and after participating in sports.

× For example, when people participate sports, they are more they're fitter and healthier.

✓ For example, when people participate in sports, they become fitter and healthier.

The phrase more they're fitter contains an incomplete and repeated structure. They are and they're have the same meaning, and only one form should be used. The verb become clearly expresses the change in people's physical condition.