Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two or three specific examples. Avoid repetition, such as “My father My father,” and use natural collocations: say “play the guitar,” “try a new sport,” and “experiment with different activities” rather than “experiment a lot of activities.” Connect the examples more smoothly with linking words such as “for example” and “also.” Keep the answer to three or four clear sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. For example, I learned to ride a bike, play the guitar, and try different sports. My father also encouraged me to read books and learn how to paint. As a result, I became quite curious and willing to experiment with new hobbies.

Sugestão: Give your opinion directly and support it with a clear reason and example. Correct the structure “suggest people to try” to “suggest that people try” or “encourage people to try,” and replace “as many different things as they can” with “as many different things as possible.” The claim that people only have free time during childhood is too absolute; adults can also try new activities, although they may have less time. Avoid repetition of “different things” and use a linking phrase such as “However” to introduce a balanced point.

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because this helps them discover their interests and develop useful skills. For instance, someone might try cooking, photography, or a new sport and discover a talent they never knew they had. However, adults usually have less free time because of work and family responsibilities, so they may need to plan these activities carefully.

× I would definitely suggest people to try different things as they can because only in their childhood they will have free time to try different things or experiment with different experiences.

✓ I would definitely suggest that people try as many different things as they can because only during childhood will they have free time to try different things or experiment with different activities.

The structure as many ... as is required to express the meaning of trying the greatest possible number of things. The original phrase different things as they can is incomplete.

× In my childhood, I did have a lot of opportunities to take part in new activities such as learning how to ride a bike, learning to play a guitar, trying a new sport.

✓ In my childhood, I did have a lot of opportunities to take part in new activities such as learning how to ride a bike, learning to play the guitar, and trying a new sport.

When referring to the musical instrument in general, English commonly uses the definite article the: play the guitar. Adding and before the final item also makes the list grammatically complete and clearer.

× My father My father taught me how to read books or how to paint and so on, so I experimented a lot of activities in my childhood.

✓ My father My father taught me how to read books or how to paint and so on, so I experimented with a lot of activities in my childhood.

The verb experiment is followed by the preposition with when referring to the activities or methods being tried. The correct pattern is experiment with something, not experiment something.

× I would definitely suggest people to try different things as they can because only in their childhood they will have free time to try different things or experiment with different experiences.

✓ I would definitely suggest that people try as many different things as they can because they will have free time to try different things or experiment with different activities only during childhood.

Only is placed more naturally before the time phrase it limits. Placing only during childhood at the end makes it clear that childhood is the limited period.