Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and gives a clear example, but there are several grammatical and phrasing problems. Say “co-curricular activities” rather than “Co curricular activities,” and use “I regularly took part in debate and public-speaking programs” instead of “joined UH debate and public speaking programs.” The sentence “it helped me” should be “they helped me” because “programs” is plural. Also, “improve my fluency and accuracy when expressing my ideas” is more natural than “Also the fluency and accuracy while expressing my ideas.” Combine the final fragment with the previous sentence to make the response more coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, absolutely. I had several opportunities to take part in co-curricular activities, especially debate and public-speaking programs. I regularly participated in them, and they helped me improve my speaking skills, fluency, and accuracy when expressing my ideas.

Sugestão: You give a clear opinion and several relevant examples, but some grammar and collocation errors reduce accuracy. Say “as many different activities as possible,” not “as many as different activities as possible.” Use “join a sports club or take part in a marathon” instead of “joining in a Sports Club like marathon.” The phrase “help them to gain skills” is acceptable, but “help them gain new skills” is more natural; “brought in their perspective” should be “broaden their perspectives.” Use linking words such as “For example” and “As a result” to organize your supporting ideas, and avoid hesitation fillers such as “uh.”

Exemplo: Definitely. I think people should try as many different activities as possible, such as hiking, cooking, or joining a sports club. Trying new things can help them develop new skills and meet people from different backgrounds. As a result, they may broaden their perspectives and find life more rewarding and interesting.

× I regularly joined UH debate and public speaking programs and it helped me a lot to improve my speaking skills.

✓ I regularly joined UH debate and public speaking programs, and they helped me improve my speaking skills.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to the plural noun programs. Use the plural pronoun they. The sentence can also use the base verb improve after helped for a more natural structure.

× Also the fluency and accuracy while expressing my ideas.

✓ They also helped improve my fluency and accuracy when I expressed my ideas.

The original sentence is a fragment because it does not contain a main verb. Add helped to make it a complete sentence. Use when I expressed my ideas to clearly connect the improvement with the speaking activity.

× Definitely, I think people should try as many as different activities as possible, for example hiking, cooking, uh joining in a Sports Club like marathon.

✓ Definitely, I think people should try as many different activities as possible, for example, hiking, cooking, joining a sports club, or running a marathon.

The correct quantifier structure is as many different activities as possible, not as many as different activities as possible. With countable plural nouns such as activities, use many directly before the adjective and noun.

× Definitely, I think people should try as many as different activities as possible, for example hiking, cooking, uh joining in a Sports Club like marathon.

✓ Definitely, I think people should try as many different activities as possible, for example, hiking, cooking, joining a sports club, or running a marathon.

The verb join is normally followed directly by the organization or group being entered, so say joining a sports club rather than joining in a sports club. Running a marathon is also the grammatically appropriate expression for the activity.

× Trying new things will help them to gain skills, meet new people and brought in their perspective so life feels more rewarding and interesting.

✓ Trying new things will help them gain skills, meet new people, and broaden their perspectives, so life feels more rewarding and interesting.

After will help them, the coordinated verbs should be in the base form: gain, meet, and broaden. Brought is a past-tense form and does not match the other verbs. Use broaden to express the meaning of expanding their perspectives.

× Trying new things will help them to gain skills, meet new people and brought in their perspective so life feels more rewarding and interesting.

✓ Trying new things will help them gain skills, meet new people, and broaden their perspectives, so life feels more rewarding and interesting.

The plural possessive determiner their should be followed by the plural noun perspectives because people generally develop more than one viewpoint or way of understanding the world.