Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer directly in the first sentence and avoid repeated phrases such as “I didn’t have the opportunity” and “so I didn’t.” Use the correct collocations “take part in activities” and “join a sports club,” not “take part of” or “Sports Club.” The phrase “social anthrax” is unclear; you may mean “social activities” or “social events.” Add one specific detail about your health or an activity you would have liked to try, and use a linking word such as “because” or “as a result.”

Exemplo: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child because I was often sick. As a result, I rarely joined sports clubs or social events. I would have liked to try swimming because it seemed both enjoyable and good for my health.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with two logically connected reasons. Correct the grammar in “try as many as possible of take as many as possible activities” and “it will gain them the experiences”; use “try as many different activities as possible” and “gain valuable experience.” Avoid repeating the same idea and finish with a complete sentence. Use a linking expression such as “In addition” to introduce the benefit of meeting new people.

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible. This helps them gain valuable experience and discover what they truly enjoy. In addition, activities such as joining a sports club can help them make new friends and develop their social skills.

× I didn't take part of a lot of activities when I was a child.

✓ I didn't take part in many activities when I was a child.

The correct preposition after take part is in, not of. Also, many is more natural than a lot of in this negative sentence, although a lot of is not grammatically impossible.

× I didn't have the opportunity to join Sports Club.

✓ I didn't have the opportunity to join a sports club.

A singular countable noun such as sports club usually needs an article when it is mentioned generally. Use a because this refers to any sports club, not a specific one.

× People should try as many as possible of take as many as possible activities as they can.

✓ People should try as many different things as possible and take part in as many activities as they can.

The structure as many as possible must be followed by a plural countable noun, such as things or activities. The original phrase as many as possible activities has the wrong word order, and of take is not grammatically correct.

× People should try as many as possible of take as many as possible activities as they can because it will gain them the experiences and they can gain a social life made by making new friends or meeting new people and.

✓ People should try as many different things as possible and take part in as many activities as they can because this will help them gain experience and develop a social life by making new friends and meeting new people.

The original sentence contains several incorrectly connected clauses and ends with an unnecessary and. Use parallel structures, such as try and take part, and connect the ideas in a complete sentence. Develop a social life is also a clearer structure than gain a social life made by making new friends.

× It will gain them the experiences.

✓ It will help them gain experience.

Experience is generally uncountable when it means knowledge or skills gained from activities, so it does not normally take the definite article the. The phrase gain experience is also the natural expression.