Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and complete the final sentence. Replace the unnatural phrase “action activities” with a specific activity, such as sports or outdoor games. Add a clear result or personal feeling to make the example more specific. Also, use “I was often encouraged” for a more natural passive structure.

Exemplo: Definitely. I had many opportunities to try new activities as a child because my parents and teachers encouraged me to take part in them. For example, I joined the school drama club and played basketball after class. These activities helped me express my emotions and become more confident.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a balanced explanation. Correct “depends on person's” to “depends on a person’s,” “monotonious” to “monotonous,” and “other ones” to “others.” Avoid unnatural phrases such as “the familiar situation,” “stimulate their mind,” and “unwind from other same”; use “stick to familiar routines,” “broaden their horizons,” and “take a break from their daily routine.”

Exemplo: I think people should try different things, although it depends on their personality and circumstances. Adventurous people may enjoy challenging activities because these experiences help them broaden their horizons and develop new skills. However, more cautious people may prefer familiar routines, so they should try new activities gradually.

× I was an outgoing child and often encouraged by my parents and teachers to get involved in different kinds of activities.

✓ I was an outgoing child and was often encouraged by my parents and teachers to get involved in different kinds of activities.

The phrase often encouraged is passive, so it needs the auxiliary verb was to agree with the subject I. The sentence contains two coordinated verb structures: I was an outgoing child and I was often encouraged.

× It entirely depends on person's own preference and personality.

✓ It entirely depends on a person's own preference and personality.

A singular countable noun such as person normally needs a determiner. Use a before person's when referring to any individual in general.

× Some people are really monotonious and enjoy the familiar situation only while other ones participate in adventurous activities and love to face the challenges so that they can stimulate their mind as well as unwind from other same.

✓ Some people are really monotonious and enjoy the familiar situation only while other ones participate in adventurous activities and love to face the challenges so that they can stimulate their minds as well as unwind from the same routine.

The pronoun they refers to plural people, so the related possessive noun should normally be plural: their minds. This creates clear number agreement between the plural subject and the noun.

× Some people are really monotonious and enjoy the familiar situation only while other ones participate in adventurous activities and love to face the challenges so that they can stimulate their mind as well as unwind from other same.

✓ Some people are really monotonious and enjoy the familiar situation only while other ones participate in adventurous activities and love to face the challenges so that they can stimulate their minds as well as unwind from the same routine.

Other same is not a complete or correctly structured noun phrase. Same normally needs a following noun, such as routine. Use the same routine to complete the phrase and make the sentence grammatically clear.