Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and well organized, and you provide specific examples. However, add a period at the end and use a linking phrase to connect the examples more naturally. You could also mention one activity you enjoyed and explain why, which would make the answer more developed.

Exemplo: Yes, my parents encouraged me to try new activities, such as sports and music lessons. For example, I joined a painting class after school and really enjoyed it because it allowed me to express my creativity. I also tried dancing for a short time, although I preferred painting in the end.

Sugestão: Answer the question directly without the repeated word “Trying.” Correct the grammar by saying “interests and talents,” and replace “excessing” with “exciting.” You also need punctuation or a linking word between the two ideas. Add a specific example or result to make your response more convincing and complete.

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and talents. It also makes life more exciting and less boring. For instance, someone who tries cooking, photography, or sports may discover a skill they never knew they had.

× Trying new things helps people discover their interest and talents.

✓ Trying new things helps people discover their interests and talents.

The plural noun talents is coordinated with interests, so interest should also be plural. Use interests when referring to several areas or subjects a person may like.

× It makes life more excessing less boring.

✓ It makes life more exciting and less boring.

Excessing is not the correct adjective in this context. The adjective exciting describes something that creates interest or enthusiasm. Also, and is needed to connect the two contrasting descriptions: more exciting and less boring.

× Trying new things helps people discover their interest and talents it makes life more excessing less boring.

✓ Trying new things helps people discover their interests and talents, and it makes life more exciting and less boring.

The original sentence joins two complete ideas without an appropriate conjunction. Use and to connect the two ideas clearly. Remember to place a comma before and when it joins two independent clauses.

× Trying Yes, trying new things helps people discover their interest and talents it makes life more excessing less boring.

✓ Yes, trying new things helps people discover their interests and talents, and it makes life more exciting and less boring.

Trying at the beginning is an unnecessary repetition, and the original sentence contains two complete clauses joined incorrectly. Begin with Yes, followed by the main sentence, and connect the two clauses with a comma and and.