Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question directly in the past tense and avoid unnatural phrases such as “I was a sort of person that want.” Use “I was the kind of person who wanted to...” and change “take” to “took” because you are describing childhood. Also, “activities” is plural, so use “I enjoyed them” and explain more specifically how one activity helped you develop.

Exemplo: Yes, I had plenty of opportunities to try new activities as a child. I was the kind of person who wanted to experience different things, so I took part in swimming, acting, singing, and even rock climbing. I especially enjoyed acting because it helped me become more confident and express myself in front of other people.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion in the first sentence and complete your answer. Avoid fillers such as “I think yep” and the unnatural phrase “note in your mind.” Use a linking word such as “however” to show the contrast between trying new things and having limited time. Add a specific reason or example to make your response more developed, and keep the answer to no more than five complete sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and strengths. However, nobody can do everything, so it is important to focus on the things that are most meaningful to them. For example, someone might try photography, cooking, and running before deciding to concentrate on the activity they enjoy most.

× Yeah, when I was a child, I was a sort of person that want to learn or try new things all the time.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, I was the sort of person who wanted to learn or try new things all the time.

The sentence describes a past period, so the verb want should be changed to its past-tense form, wanted. Who is also more natural than that when referring to a person.

× So I often take part in activities like swimming, acting, singing or even climbing rocks.

✓ So I often took part in activities like swimming, acting, singing, or even rock climbing.

Because the answer refers to activities the student did as a child, the past-tense form took part is required instead of the present-tense form take part.

× I enjoy it because they help me gain confidence and learn.

✓ I enjoyed them because they helped me gain confidence and learn.

The answer is describing past childhood experiences, so enjoy and help should be changed to the past-tense forms enjoyed and helped.

× I enjoy it because they help me gain confidence and learn.

✓ I enjoyed them because they helped me gain confidence and learn.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to multiple activities. Use the plural pronoun them to agree with activities.

× I think yep I have a mindset that we can do anything but we could not do everything so if you want to learn or do something new, just note in your mind that

✓ I think so. I have a mindset that we can do anything, but we cannot do everything. So, if you want to learn or do something new, just keep in mind that you cannot do everything at once.

The statement expresses a general belief, so cannot is more appropriate than the past or conditional form could not. For general truths and advice, use can or cannot consistently.

× I think yep I have a mindset that we can do anything but we could not do everything so if you want to learn or do something new, just note in your mind that

✓ I think so. I have a mindset that we can do anything, but we cannot do everything. So, if you want to learn or do something new, just keep in mind that you cannot do everything at once.

The original is a run-on sentence with several ideas joined without clear punctuation. It also ends with that, which introduces an unfinished clause. Divide the ideas into complete sentences and finish the final thought. The natural expression is keep in mind rather than note in your mind.