Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Answer the question directly and use accurate grammar and vocabulary. “My parents in college me” should be “My parents encouraged me,” “because they believe” should be “because they believed,” and “At the resorts” is incorrect in this context; use “As a result” or “Instead.” Also, keep the answer concise and add one specific example of an activity you missed.

Exemplo: Not really. My parents encouraged me to focus on my studies rather than take part in extracurricular activities because they believed this would improve my grades. As a result, I spent most of my free time doing homework and attending extra lessons instead of trying activities such as sports or music.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion, then support it with a logical example. Correct the grammar errors: “it's helps” should be “it helps,” “learning a meal language” should be “learning a new language,” “create” should be “creates,” and “which boost” should be “which boosts.” Replace the unnatural phrase “charm opportunities” with “career opportunities” or “social opportunities,” and use linking words such as “For instance” and “As a result.”

Exemplo: Yes, definitely. Trying different activities helps people broaden their horizons and step outside their comfort zones. For instance, learning a new language can create career opportunities while also helping people understand other cultures and meet new friends. As a result, they may become more confident and develop stronger social skills.

× Not really, my parents in college me to focus on studying rather than joining extracurricular activities because they believe that it would improve my school grades and overall academic performance.

✓ Not really, my parents encouraged me to focus on studying rather than joining extracurricular activities because they believed that it would improve my school grades and overall academic performance.

The phrase in college is not a verb, so the main clause lacks a correct verb. Use encouraged to express the parents' past action. Because the entire situation is in the past, believe should also be changed to believed.

× Not really, my parents in college me to focus on studying rather than joining extracurricular activities because they believe that it would improve my school grades and overall academic performance.

✓ Not really, my parents encouraged me to focus on studying rather than joining extracurricular activities because they believed that it would improve my school grades and overall academic performance.

The answer describes the student's childhood, so the past tense is required. Change believe to believed to maintain consistent past-time reference. Use the past-tense verb encouraged for the completed action.

× At the resorts, I spend most of my time doing homework and attending extra lessons.

✓ At the resorts, I spent most of my time doing homework and attending extra lessons.

The phrase as a child refers to a past period. Therefore, spend must be changed to the past-tense form spent.

× This is because it's helps them to broaden their horizons and step out of their comfort zones.

✓ This is because it helps them to broaden their horizons and step out of their comfort zones.

It is already the subject of the verb, so the extra possessive form 's is incorrect. Use it helps, not it's helps. The verb helps correctly has the third-person singular ending -s.

× For example, learning a meal language not only create more charm opportunities but also helps to understand other cultures and meet new people, which boost confidence and social skills.

✓ For example, learning a meal language not only creates more charm opportunities but also helps to understand other cultures and meet new people, which boosts confidence and social skills.

The subject learning a meal language is singular, so the verbs in the not only ... but also structure should be singular: creates and helps. The relative pronoun which refers to the singular activity, so boost must be changed to boosts.