Opportunities— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the activity and when it happened. Then give one or two specific supporting details (for example how often you played, a memorable moment, or what you learned) using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid repetition and incorrect verb tenses (use past tense for childhood).

Exemplo: Yes. When I was a child I played as a goalkeeper for my school football team. For example, I trained twice a week and once saved a penalty that helped our team win a local match. Because I practiced regularly, I became confident and learned to stay calm under pressure.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with two concise, specific reasons linked with appropriate connectors (such as “because” and “for example”). Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and article use) and avoid vague phrases like “several things at the same time.” Explain the benefit with a concrete example or result.

Exemplo: Yes, I think people should try many different things because it helps them discover new interests and develop useful skills. For example, learning a musical instrument can improve concentration, while travelling can broaden your perspective. As a result, trying new activities can increase confidence and open up more opportunities.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes I did.

The question asks about past experiences ('Did you have... as a child?') so the student should use past tense. 'Yes I do' uses present tense; change to 'Yes I did' to match the past timeframe. Tips: Listen for past-time cues like 'Did' or 'as a child' and use past simple (did, was, used to).

× When I was a child once I used to be a goalkeeper and my friends told me you are very good and you will not leave ball to be a goal and you are pro protecting goal very carefully.

✓ When I was a child I used to be a goalkeeper, and my friends told me I was very good; I would not let the ball go into the goal, and I was good at protecting the goal carefully.

Multiple issues: tense consistency and incorrect verb forms. 'Used to be' is correct for past habit; 'my friends told me you are' should be 'they told me I was' to keep past perspective (reported speech). 'You will not leave ball to be a goal' is ungrammatical: use 'I would not let the ball go into the goal.' 'You are pro protecting goal very carefully' should be 'I was good at protecting the goal carefully.' Tips: Keep verb tenses consistent in past narration, use 'let' for allowing something to happen, and use 'good at' + -ing for skills (good at protecting). Use commas or semicolons to separate clauses.

× In my opinion, yes they should because different things makes people to be comfortable and it's interesting to use several things in the same time and it it allows you to see other things how they are.

✓ In my opinion, yes, they should, because trying different things makes people feel more comfortable, and it's interesting to use several things at the same time; it also allows you to see how other things are.

Several errors: subject-verb agreement and verb patterns. 'Different things makes' should be 'different things make' (plural subject with plural verb). 'Makes people to be comfortable' is incorrect; use 'make people feel comfortable' (make + object + base verb). 'In the same time' should be 'at the same time.' Extra word repetition 'it it' removed. 'Allows you to see other things how they are' should be 'allows you to see how other things are' (correct word order). Tips: Match verb number to subject, use 'make someone do' without 'to', use 'at the same time' and place 'how' before the clause it introduces.